I stand above a great chatreuse hill, shivering heavily with fear. Behind me stands an enourmous grey statue of a fox. Legend has it that the statue comes to life at night, it is said to be the king of all foxes in the hill. I stare at it until the evening, when the monarch of the foxes awakens. It starts to run swiftly towards me. I realise the legend is true. I get out my knife and stab the beast, repelling it from me. The fox is a terrible creature. I stab it once more and it runs away. The quest to sla y the creature has begun. To be conti ued...
As a regular writer and reader here, I say this isn't good. It's rushed, there's no description, and with the present tense, you made a jumbled mess. Not to mention it just looks unappealing to read because it's just a big jumbled paragraph.
Like d_bo said, it kinda is a jumble of words. It's like the Lord of Writers got terribly sick and barfed that story up.
When d_bo trolls (which he isn't really doing right now) he does not fail. And no is actually trolling your "story". That paragraph just summed up the whole story, i already know that the anonymous protaganist kills the wolf. Besides if it came alive at night wouldnt everyone know the legend is true? And it wouldnt be a legend, just fact.