Feather's Critique Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by FeatherHunter, Jul 14, 2011.

  1. Really? Why? Is it getting too boring? I might've dragged it too long I think...
     
  2. I feel that my review was to Blazé. Simple, one-word phrases left me confused as to what the critic meant. In the end, the review was unclear and did not help. 
     
  3.  But he was not even a criyic then.
     
  4. I haven't crictiqued your story yet...colt...

    Stora, I'm not sure. I find myself skipping whole paragraphs and find it just...to drab and semi-boring lately.
     
  5. nothing much is happening right not, the problem with my story I think is that it has to be realistic. Battles can't happen all the time and what not, so my characters mostly find themselves preparing...which is boring :/ The chapters that I'm writing/planning now are basically the conclusion/ending.
     
  6. Idk...somethings gotta change.
     
  7. A way to MAKE battles happen all the time is to have a campaign with plan behind it. You could have a diversion and then an attack on the main target, and maybe even a counter attack
     
  8. SHHHHHHHHH. That's gonna be in the review of her story!
     
  9.  I wish i had more typing time. I'm eager to share my fantasy. I can't just tell people because it would ruin the stories
     
  10. uh actually....that's what i'm doing right now for the conclusion...i planned it a long time ago that the ending would be a battle. the only problem is that they have to do a lot of searching and planning and what not to have gotten to this point. That's just how i planned it back then, should've planned the middle better though...
     
  11. New critique up.
     
  12. Would you care to do one for "Corruption"?
     
  13. 0.o I thought you were doing by chapter lol
     
  14. So when eye of the eagle is done you will critique that?

    Thank you for the favorable review. However why does everyone seem to think that every story about a girl need a man? Seriously? Isn't she allowed to be completely uninterested in romance?
     
  15. Not all women like men... q
     
  16. Yes, Pimella, you are correct.

    And I don't know... it just seems right.
     
  17. Can you do a critique for It's A Long Story? :p