Emily's Pov. He stormed up to us and dragged us into the car. It was eerily silent all the way home and I could see beads of sweat glistening on her brow. I didn't so much as blink, I would be gone soon anyway. We were marched inside to the living room, where piles of Christmas cake lay untouched on several plates. Tissues were strewn around the floor leading to the plush sofa where Celeste's large, bubbly mother sat bawling for all she was worth and blowing her nose loudly on a huge hanky. Celeste's father retreated to a nearby armchair, and sat hunched over with his head in his hands, breathing heavily. Celeste looked very nervous, but not scared. "I'm sorry." she murmured softly. There was still not a reply from either of them, just the rhythmic ticking of the small round clock on the overcrowded mantelpiece, Celeste's mother's low sobbing, and her father's heavy breathing, who was now looking very much like a large intimidating bull. "Go." panted her father. "Go now before I do something I regret." I made as if to go to the spare room, but instead went into Celeste's. We stared at each other for a while, both of us still sopping wet and shivering from the cold. Eventually I couldn't help it, I broke into a grin at the sight of Celeste standing there, looking very much like a candle, her flame red hair sticking up at all sorts of odd angles and her white dress patterned with mud and an assortment of leaves. But there was a light shining in her eyes I'd never seen before, and her smile mirrored mine. "Do I need to say I'm sorry?" I asked tentatively. Celeste snorted. "I'm not." she rolled her eyes. **** I was "asleep" when Celeste's father came, and there is no other word for it, trundling up the stairwell. He practically banged down the door in an attempt to get into Celeste's room. She sleepily stumbled out, rubbing her eyes and yawning. "Dad it's nearly two a.m, can you please give out to me in the morning?" He ignored her. "Who was he?" he demanded, spitting and raging, his face turning a curious shade of purple, "and what has she-" he pointed at me, (I was standing outside the room at the time) "-got to do with it? And do you know what you have done to your mother? AT CHRISTMAS FOR CHRISTS' SAKE!?! You had better say your prayers, Celeste Anne Young, because I am not finished with you yet, you can be sure of that." **** The next morning Celeste was awoken by her father at half six. I got up with her, after twiddling my thumbs for a good seven and a half hours. It turned out that this was going to happen until she went back to school, a week from now. After a morning of sweeping, mopping and removing all signs of Christmas, Celeste and I were permitted to get dressed and have some breakfast, much to Celeste's relief. Suddenly, Celeste groaned. "Ugh. I still have to do that stupid project." she grumbled, "And Mum's taken my laptop. And any Christmas presents I may have acquired. Ugh, I hate her. And him." "Mmm. That's really horrible." I shrugged. She looked at me strangely, and muttered something I couldn't quite catch before retreating to her bowl of soggy shapes she called cheerios. Neither of Celeste's parents would make so much as eye contact now, and you could hear the mutterings of "that boy they were with" from her parents room at night. Only on the day before Celeste started for school again was she even allowed to re-start her history project, and use her laptop in doing so. Celeste approached me beforehand. "Um, Emily..." she began uncertainly, pointedly looking at anything but me, "Emily would you be able to tell me what really happened? So I could use that instead?" she trailed off at the end. "Er, sure. But um, what's really bothering you?" I searched her face, which was creased with worry and ultimately, stress. She wrung her hands. "Emily what happened to Jared? Where is he? And what's going to happen to you when I go back to school?" she whispered. She was concerned, worried even, about her dead brother, and when she was going to see him again, which I knew she wouldn't. And I was going to have to break the news. Great. "He's gone. Moved on. Died, whatever you want to call it." I bit my lip. Celeste went as pale as me and flopped down on the floor. "W-what?" she whimpered, "He's just, he's just... gone?" I nodded solemnly, "B-but I, I had so many questions, I- I wanted to, I-" and with that she broke down. I didn't have the heart then to tell her that I too, if all went going to plan, would be following after him soon *****please feedback this might be the last time I post.
I didn't really feel that I should for a few reasons. 1. Lack of readers. Any that did take the time; like you and elanme, and a few others; thank you so much. Everyone else I had to beg. Or blackmail. 2. If I finished it someone might take it or publish it or whatever. It's not -obviously- worth that but some people are desperate and well, ugh idk. 3. I am currently editing it on my laptop; there were just too many mistakes and the description was crap. Now the whole prologue is different and stuff. It was pointless writing it when all I wanted was to scrap the whole thing and start again. 4. I'm not as active as I was; and I certainly won't be soon as I'm starting secondary in a few weeks, and won't have the time. (in america it's like, middle school or something.) 5. My main character is two years older than me, and I am starting to wonder if I should change it to be more of well, advanced. I have 3 younger siblings and was always conscious of them noting something I didn't want them to, or discovering a new word . I may continue in a while, but you can be guaranteed it will be a bit of a longer while then normal...
God I started reading at 11PM and I stopes at 1AM couldn't stop reading till page 15 nice story bro I'm gonna. Go to bed nao bai
This... I agree with the first bit. I find the plot itself to be confusing- did you outline it first? You seem to be adding a lot of unnecessary elements (a prominent one being the never-explained 'shadow mirror'). It's hard to read for me, because there's too much going on, in my opinion. I'd say pick a main plot and make it clear. Other than that, I agree with iZaln.
Okay. Now I'm pi$$ed. Or should I say half and half? 1. You stole my idea and just twisted it a bit to make it your own. This may seem 'okay' in your eyes but it's not in mine. 2. You have an imagination. Come up with YOUR OWN story please. I'm sure you could come up with something there. 3. Shadow mirror? Wtf? If I get that one of these characters are traveling through a mirror I'm going to be really freaking pi$$ed. 4. If whatever character is traveling through a mirror this is whatever percentage of my story. I think we need to start to talk.
wtf? Arimay I had this idea long before I joined kaw. I didnt read your story until a month ago. They dont travel through a mirror. It's nothing like your story. So get your facts right before you accuse people of things u imagine.
I released a book on KaW about this talking to dead people traveling through mirrors and sh!t. You even SAID on my wall that you book was going to be like mine.
Congratulations, not only did you bypass, you managed to accuse someone of plagiarism. I assume by your wall/etak's post that your story is a love story. Am I blind, or is there practically no romance in this book? So, your acheivements of the day: 1)Bypassing 2)Accusing someone of plagiarism... Because their book COULD go the same direction as yours. Whoop de freaking do. Yeah. She said it was a ghost story. It has undead people and mirrors. So it's automatically plagiarism? I don't think you did any other stupid **** though.
Yes but sir, I greatly advise you get a brain because she COMBINED several books of mine. -Mirrors you can travel through -Talking to dead people -Dead people trapped in mirrors Plus she obviously got this idea FROM my book based of her wall posts. You may think that's nice but she's continuing someone else's story instead of making her own. She's copying. She can use her own imagination to come up with something you know. Your missing the point.