@celeste So? Does it really matter? To be honest, I don't really see how you have the right to pick my story to pieces. Every single little flaw I have, you pick up on it. I'm sorry; I'm not perfect. And you're definitely not. Unless you're going to muster up some CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM, not just pulling my story apart, I suggest you discontinue reading. It is highly irritating when there are more capable, supportive and helpful writers/commenters about. Rant over :')
You may be 'pointing it out'. Even so, I think I would know how I want to structure my story. You don't need to point that out to me: I'm fully aware of what IS and ISN'T in my story.
Maybe proof read before you post (although it's harder if you are writing in blocks, obviously). For celests n yours issue.
Just letting all you know:I know my story kind of revolves around romance at the moment. But that's just because I need to build up the story; this is just the beginning Thanks guys, I've nearly finished the next chapter! -Swag x
Next chapter up guys! Please don't write comments on the actual story. It downgrades the overall effect of it! -Swag x
Just finished chapter 8 and I love the story more then the Hunger Games! You need to be an Author! I love this story scoop much! Hurry up on Chapt. 9!
OH MY GOD, REALLY? Ahhh! I like LOVE The Hunger Games, both the books and the film! Thank you so much! -Swag x