Broken: Feedback/Misc. Disscussion

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Irin (01), Jan 23, 2011.

  1. Thanks Stora

    Lol @ Mystique

    Next chapter is up!
     
  2. 
     
  3. Wait... Did Irin leave 
     
  4. Sorry everyone,life was getting crazy. And dont worry, I would NEVER leave without a long elaborate goodbye speech that would make all of you cry.

    Anyway chapter 8 is up.
     
  5. 

    I'm so happy you're so happy
    We are all so sloppy happy!
     
  6. Omnomnomnomnom
    Just realized you started the next book... Guess that means I have to update endgame now don't I...
    Btw it was epic as always. The battle scene with the wolf was perfectly timed, things were on the verge of getting a bit boring. But hey, you caught it and converted it to a great chapter.
    Seth
     
  7. SETH YOU DIDNT QUIT EITHER???wha-
     
  8. 24th paragraph in chapter 8- u have eye path.
     
  9. 22nd paragraph in chapter 8-i felt irritated i wasn't good enough at magic to do it herself.
     
  10. 21st paragraph in chapter 7-it had stabbed the wold for the second time
     
  11. But thats nothing compared to the quality of everything else! That really good!  i expect more tomorrow>:)
     
  12. Thanks, I was just reading over some of it. But you forgot the 'war,' instead of 'wore,' I think its somewhere in chapter 8. I don't know what I was thinking. XD

    And bye tomorrow? Seriously? I dont work well with deadlines.
     
  13. @Mystique, lol, yes, I'm very slappy happy! XD

    Loved the short story, btw!

    @Seth, I can see your point. It gets boring writing about a character who does nothing but mope. I needed a way to get her out of her slump, and decided to kill two birds with one stone and have her find Paltier.

    And yes, you do need to write more endgame. Like...now. And then write a second book...then a third.

    Anyway, thanks guys!
     
  14. Fine i'll give you two days..
     
  15. Three word sentances not good maybe add more descriptives


    ~ Poison
     
  16. It was awesome!!!!!!!