Awww thxs but idk about that no one except u and shinigamichigo read it Ichigo if Tite kobo even read it I would be honored I have tons of respect for him writing my new part
Bleach Fan Fiction 9 As Amehime lay sleeping in Ichigos arms Urahara noticed she was clutching a hollow mask with blue and black streaks on it "Well look what we have here she actually controlled her hollow form" he said with a chuckle. In Amehime's dream Misoyo came and talked to her "Let me achieve my bankai, I know we are strong enough" " No" Amehime said sternly "Why not" Misoyo said "Do you not believe I can achieve bankai?" He said " No it's just" she said looking down "it's just what!" Misoyo said obviously agitated "I know your I mean our true power and I don't want to risk" she was instantly cut off by Misoyo "Trust me nothing will happen I'm always here to protect you" he said " We can be strong Amehime your just holding off please" he said " Ok" Amehime said "I trust you" she closed her eyes and then she opened them Ichigo was holding her in his arms her face flushed red "oh, your awake" Ichigo said smiling "I'm glad we didn't lose you, Let's get going Urahara has to tell us our mission" Plz comment srry it's short again don't have much time lol
Haha but why so much on toshiro you need more on ichigo and about him being saddened since all the friends he'd met over the last three years were disappearing right before his eyes. Also the sudden deafening voice of Zangetsu and shirosaki as they minimized from his soul sent a tear down his cheek. Yet how a sudden kiss from orihime replaced the tear and gave ichigo something to look forward to.
It's good so far I didn't see there were more pages at first but orihime deserves ichigo and there is a lot of name misspellings that make things confusing like yoruichi is how to spell it and uraharra is how and etc. Plus what about the espada did u forget or are u just not done? It is good it has me interested and anxious for the new manga this week!
Lol thxs ur comments guys Ik Zangetsu I'm not done and personally I think orrihime is horrible and dosent even deserve Ichigo and srry about the name misspellings I found my bleach book ppl calm down thxs shinigamichigo and others don't worry I will keep writing even if u don't agree with the story line *cough* Zangetsu *cough* P.s plz don't add your own story lines 2 my story Ik some other threads do that plz don't on mine Thxs again 2 all my readers
"Hey Urahara" Ichigo said groggily "What's our.." Ichigo fell asleep in a heap on the ground "So much for Ichigo" Urahara said with a chuckle "Well Amehime I hope you can tell Ichigo your mission" "Hunt down any remaining Espadas in The World of The Living" Urahara said "Got it" Amehime said her Gigai slumped to the ground as she disappeared " I'M AWAKE!" "whaaa where did everyone go?" Ichigo said "Amehime where did age run off to" He said to himself as he got out of his Gigai and ran after her as he caught up to her she explained the mission. Then she stopped in mid-sentence "Ichigo,Do you feel that?" her eyes widened as a explosion went off under them in Karakura town "You didn't think I'd let you off the hook did you?" A voice said A tall lean figure appeared out of the dust his blue hair catching the sun his bleach white teeth smiling like he was having the time of his life " Miss me?"The guy said " GRIMMJOW!" Amehime said furiously Plz rate and comment srry I have 2 write these longer
Bleach Fan Fiction 10 "Hey come on sweetie" Grimmjow said " I know you missed me" He said giving off his trademark grin "I'm not your sweetheart and I didn't miss you!" Amehime said looking him straight in the eye "Awww come on deep down in your heart" Grimmjow was stopped short when he saw Ichigo " Hello Grimmjow" he said coldly "Ichigo how are you, how's your sisters and your father" He said still smirking "Shut up Grimmjow or I will wipe that smirk off your face for you!"Ichigo said snarling "What are you going to do Ichigo, All the Espadas you are losing your spiritual pressure which must mean your losing your zanpakto" Grimmjow said obviously proud of finding that out. Ichigos eyes widened before he could react water came roaring at Grimmjow "TAKE IT BACK!" Amehime screamed "Great now I'm going to drown" Grimmjow said sarcastically "TAKE WHAT YOU SAID ABOUT ICHIGO BACK!" Amehime said her spiritual pressure rising "No" Grimmjow said "Fine" Amehime said with no mercy in her voice " Prepare to die" Plz comment (made it short just 4 u ichigo)
Ok just some some helpers: •use paragraphs. It gets confusing to keep reading the same block. •when you do speech marks, do them like this: "Don't leave a gap". Not like this " Can you see the gap at the beginning?" It doesn't really matter, but it just makes it more clear for your readers. •New speaker, new line. When someone speaks, put it onto a new line. •use commas too. At the beginning, you said something like 'He brandished his sword it was all ice'. Something like that. It should be 'He brandished his sword, it was made all out of ice.' Theres some other things that I can't remember. But it is a great story, and you are a great writer. If you want to view any of these things and how to use them, check my story: Surviving the McCasey Sisters. Thanks! Great story, can't wait to read the rest of it.
Hey to all my readers (if there are still some) I want to know what songs would be good with certain parts of my "mini book" here are a few very popular songs in amvs and bleach fan videos and even sone bleach songs if you haven't listened to any go on YouTube if you can and look them up here they are. *Down with the sickness(swearing in this song you have been warned) *Nothing can be explained *Chop Suey-Extremely used song for amvs *On the Precipice of defeat *Torn apart-from the bount them I believe *D-bleach song 3rd opening I believe *Float on- another good amv song *Asterick- by orange range 1st opening on bleach Plz tell ur friends 2 read my forum it's getting empty
AWW! I'm so proud of you sis! Other than plenty of misspellings. You're doing a awesome job! I love it. Keep it up!!