Atlantric: Unknown Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Storallelite, Nov 30, 2010.

  1. @Keir lol I wish
    @Karl hmmm nice answers, Ty!
     
  2. 2ND QUESTION CONFUSES ME :(
     
  3. Lol that's why I chose it
     
  4. I like in the beginning how u 'turned your mind off' lol
     
  5. Lol thanks ordo

    *I noticed some typo's so I'll go fix that asap*
     
  6. hmmm i can't remember if i fixed those typos or not...lol
    i'll be writing the next part this week, i might finish by the weekend hopefully :?
     
  7. The 'ntire story?
     
  8. The typos? I just copied and pasted the first 5 chapters into Word2007 and found millions of typos and mistakes...lol
    If u refer to writing...well...there are at least 3-5 more chapters(not including parts) that I have planned. But I want to finish writing the current chapter and the one more.
     
  9. Lol millions, dont be too hard on yourself
     
  10. Lol yeah, maybe more like 100
     
  11. What's today's date?
     
  12. How do u spell cought?
     
  13. Lol lady's post :L
     
  14. I didn't see my father til I was in the third grade.
    Well, see his true forum that is.
    He told me he was my father, and he'd been visiting me everyday as teachers and strangers.
    My father is a shape shifter.

    I was taken from my dad when I was very young, a infant.
    The Members of Parliament saw me as a liability, a disadvantage, even, to my father, as leader of Atlantric.
    He became president by accident a mere mix up in voting.
    Before he was president he was a parliament member.
    -------
    I can do something I call "Telestruction"
    I can crush veins in people let blood run freely into their bodies, slowly killing them.
    I can also crush organs and even control peoples bodies.
    -----
    I use a unique weapon known as: Stelonique
    It's a sword I received from my father that channels telekinesis.
    I found it in the vault attached to it was a letter saying:
    "Use this if you have telekinesis"


    Is that enough stora?
     
  15. Caught<---that's how u spell it
     
  16. Yes Thankyou feather!! Since I have time I'll probably add more to Jerad's POV :)
     
  17. New post....at last lol