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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Storallelite, Nov 30, 2010.

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  1. Another insightful chapter. Not trying to criticise it... But the sudden change in view points may get a bit hard to follow. Try writing whole chapters as different view points maybe? I cant wait to see what me and risana get up to!! Btw who is she? Lol
     
    #241 Croluxian, Jan 9, 2011
  2. @cro, I think risina was Gloomi's character.

    @Stora, great chapter! I was honostly shocked at the end. But I agree that the viewpoints should be seprate chapters unless they're short. Other than that, great job! Can't wait for the next chapter!
     
    #242 *Irin (01), Jan 9, 2011
  3. @Feather yes I know
    @Cro Ty! there won't be many chapters like this, This might be the only one with three different views. At most later on it'll just be told from Evaline's point of view(my character) and yes I'll probably write full chapters with only one point of view.(Jerad's and possibly Risana or Matt.) I did it a lot this chapter because everyone was spilt up.
    GlooMi created Risana
     
    #243 Storallelite, Jan 9, 2011
  4. Ty Irin! Lol I wonder why u didn't expect it?(Diane's death)
     
    #244 Storallelite, Jan 9, 2011
  5. Diane just seemed like one of those eternal characters
    One that'll be in the story forever like myself I hope
     
    #245 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  6. I'm not sure. It was just a suprise to me, I think. I agree with feather. It seemed like shed be there forever, untill the end.
     
    #246 *Irin (01), Jan 9, 2011
  7. Hmmm...well I never planned for Diane to be permanent. I just needed her in the beginning to get the story going, I hope I didn't shock you guys too muchlol
     
    #247 Storallelite, Jan 9, 2011
  8. Lol u did though
     
    #248 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  9. Lol u did though
     
    #249 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  10. I might change the events a bit then...
     
    #250 Storallelite, Jan 9, 2011
  11. Yeah Diane was a good character
     
    #251 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  12. I wasn't completely shocked, but I didn't expect it at all. I think it was because the setup was done very well.
     
    #252 *Irin (01), Jan 9, 2011
  13. Lol I agree irin
     
    #253 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  14. Very nice setup
     
    #254 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  15. Lol I'll take that as a compliment
     
    #255 Storallelite, Jan 9, 2011
  16. Lol
     
    #256 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  17. Mmm... The good thing about vacations is the fact that one leaves FanFiction and when they return there is a euphoria of new chapters :p

    Loveeeee it! This story is beast mode . And FH, according to my mind read, you're a scared little brat deep down inside... Hmm. And you TK powers? Pah, mind over muscle. And TKing. Just wait Fish Boy, pretty soon you'll be roasted tuna or rolled up sushi.

    iZaln
     
    #257 Nlaz, Jan 9, 2011
  18. Lol at iZaln's post and I can't die only injury myself... She's dead can't change the past give her a good burial please! Karl should get away, but stays behind for the love of his life and he fits in with the weird people their!
     
    #258 *NecroHyphen (01), Jan 9, 2011
  19. iZ don't test me bruh,I will choke you with that rubber necklace you have!!!
     
    #259 FeatherHunter, Jan 9, 2011
  20. Nah i always thought diane would leave the story. Just didnt know when or how.
    Btw i got another plot line if u want it. Risana and matt could have somethin goin on then evaline realises that she likes matt but finds out risana and matt are datin. Feel free to use it
     
    #260 Croluxian, Jan 9, 2011
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