Assassin's Creed: Descendants Feedback and Etc.

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Nlaz, Aug 17, 2010.

  1. Name: Salvatore Detorres
    Salvatore Detorres was born into a family with many siblings. Six to be exact. Four had died early due to complications. Of the remaining two, Salvatore was considered the stronger, so their father, Marcos taught Salvatore how to work with metal and iron. When he was 24, Salvatore already ran his own blacksmith joint. His father had died prior to this. Not much was known of Salvatore's older brother, Ferdinando. Salvatore went on to buy out his competition and when he was 33, he had 4 blacksmith joints. His success continued, and he eventually owned almost all of the blacksmith places in Roma. He grew incredibly rich, and he married Marriana Rigotina. They had two children, Rulio and Lucina. The family grew especially rich when the Renaissance caught onto Rome. This was where Salvatore's workshops experienced the most income. Not much else is known about Salvatore except for the fact that he was part of the Assassin Order in Rome. His blacksmith joints continued on and were taken over by his son Rulio eventually.

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  2. Excellent database entry, and new post.
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    Seth
     
  3. Thanks. Today's chapter will be up sooner or later...

    iZaln
     
  4. Posted today's chapter, and here is our new database character:

    Name: Vincenzo Toínas
    Vincenzo grew up on the streets. His parents had abandoned him when he was just 5. He had to learn to survive on his own. When he was just 8, he was convicted of stealing money from one of the high officials. He was sent to prison, even though he was so young. He spent two days in prison before breaking out. He had started a riot, and managed to steal the keys from the guards and released all of the prisoners. One of the prisoners, Enesto, decided to stay with him, and taught Vincenzo basic survival tips. He also taught Vincenzo basic reading skills and how to fight. Years later, Vincenzo was once again in court, but not alone. He had a small group of thieves with him, with Enesto as his right-hand man. They were all sentenced to death, but before that could happen, there was an attack on the court. The Assassin Order rescued Vincenzo from the authorities. Soon after the escape, both Vincenzo and Enesto were accepted into the Assassin Order. He went on to work with the Assassinos, and in the process, his small band grew into a guild of criminals, known as Espriti, or "spirit." Nothing else is know of Vincenzo, as he was very secretive and not many ever heard or seen of him. Only the Assassin Order and his guild, Espriti. 

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  5. I just noticed but ur using Spanish not Italian for some of the stuff other than that it's a great story
     
  6. During the Reniassance of Italy, Spanish was mixed with Italian. It wasn't for another few years that Italy would root out any relations to Spanish because of some... Friction between them. Also, I was somewhat common for people to speak oter languages since schools were starting to get better during the Reniassance. Both Spanish, Italian, and French are all descended from Latin, so it's common to find closely related or similar words. I had to research Italy during the Reniassance period and so forth. Thanks though :)

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  7. *it
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    Spelling Errors Lolz.

    iZaln
     
  8. Oh got it.hey can I join iwrite co I got an idea for a story and marodo said u guys would probly b able to help me
     
  9. Well I'm not affiliated with iWrite Co. I am part of iZaln Enterprises™, but I am an assisting editor of iWrite Co., so you can join. Just post in the iWrite Co. Thread. And any story idea is fine, and if you want, you can post your chapters before they go public for some people to edit for you.

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  10. I did but I don't think anyone answered back
     
  11. They'll get around to it probably.

    iZaln
     
  12. Woooo! Go zaln. Been trying to keep up with the story. Lot of reading >.>

    Awesome so far. Love it :D
     
  13. Thanks guys. To make up for no chapter yesterday, kinda large chapter today! Sorry, but no database ATM..

    iZaln
     
  14. (>")>iZaln<("<) write more... NOW! 
     
  15. More?! Jeez, lol that's slave driving Gloom! Lmfao, jk. Sure, sure, hopefully I'll be able to get another chapter up for you guys by tomorrow.

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  16. Haven't been writing much, so I'll leave a pic of something I was drawing during class...

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    iZaln
     
  17. You drew that???
     
  18. Yes ma'am. Based it off one of the AC2 game art pictures, so I decided to mainly use lines and a few shade-in's. :) I was realllllll bored at school this whole frikin week lol.

    iZaln
     
  19. Wow. You're a real good drawer