A Foot Print In the Sand Fans! 

I just thought that if i were Ari and i got those kind of reviews over and over, id get frustrated very quickly and stop writing.  We really dont wannt that to happen to ari, do we? 

 

Yeah, thanx   I hope ari doesnt get mad cuz we were fightig on her fan page  Lol! 

 

*sigh* if she is getting those reviews over and over, she should listen to the reviews and become a better writer :roll:

 

 No shes not, i was only saying if i was getting them, blah blah blah blah blah.

 

Ya but 5 people so far have said that she needs to improve

 

Yes but -  Omg. Just let Ari deal with you. Sorry i ever said anything. I started it. And when Ari comes, make sure you ask about the feedback thread.

 

Idk if I can. I gtg to school soon. And it's fine Kiki, some people like cake better than veggies.

 

If it was something such as "you suck gtfo Fan Fiction" I could understand your outrage Kiki. However if it is something as simple as organization, she should change it especially if it's been told to her many times (by myself included). If you're a writer, you hav to be able to take criticism of a much higher caliber than this, and admittedly arimay has proven herself to take it with grace. If you cannot do this, then don't write. Organization has very little to do with the writing quality, and everything to do with readability. I like the story, but I would still giver her a D for organization, because she needs to show more paragraphs to make the reader less confused (try skipping a line between each paragraph it makes it more readable) so good luck and Kiki, stop trying to stop her from improving

 

:devil: Pwned

 

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Hey ari! U should get a writing app! It would really improve your writing quality and you'd get fewer bad reviews. Just go to the AppStore and search documents, and find a free one! Hope I could help!

 

I have too it's a great story!!!! There is some stuff u can do to make it better but I think if u get a good editor then maybe u could publish but keep writing!!!!

 

I have a guide to writing on here. Plus arimay everyone can tell your ignoring the criticism  thats what makes your story organization so bad, and your over kill on the long dry descriptions, and your general lack of any interesting verbs.

 

Luv it 

 

>.< sorry i just felt bad for her. Just goes to show you i wud never be a good writer 

 

Hurry up with it!