Not bad at all. The last part was a little twist in it, I love this story. I couldn't stop reading. I had to slow down a bit. << sounds wrong lmao Nice story.
Hey guys I'm back. I think my writing is pretty rusty so yea. Sorry if my story gets REALLY bad. Anyways here's another part. Part 22 I dreamt about lighting those houses on fire. I slowly walked down the road, houses burning everywhere around me. I held a lighter in one hand and a knife in another. I made my way back to my own house. I kicked the wooden door, which was pretty old, and saw my parents sitting down at the table. "Mizuno Suzuki! You're in a whole lot of trouble young girl." my mother said angrily. My father tried to calm her down but he was afraid of her. So when she beat me he just stood by, watching. I hated them both. My father less, since he wasn't all that mean but he's a liar. He said he loved me. Yet he never helps me. She kept on lecturing me, knowing I was the one who set the houses on fire. "You're annoying..." I muttered under my breath. "WHAT WAS THAT?!" she yelled. I looked up at her with an angry look on my face and dropped the lighter. "I SAID YOU'RE ANNOYING!!!!" I screamed so loud the old house shook. I ran towards her and stabbed her stomach with a knife. She screamed in pain and dropped to the floor. My father bent down to help her. Bad choice. I stabbed his shoulder and he slumped down next to her. "Die...die... DIE!!!" I yelled, stabbing them both in the chest. I grabbed my mother's hair and carefully sliced her head off. When I was done with her I did the same to my father. I wrapped both their heads in some bandages and stuffed them in a bag. I brought the knife with me and lit the house with the lighter. I quickly ran out of the house and escaped the town. I jerked awake, sweating and panting. I stood up and ran inside the house. "Where are they..." I muttered. I sprinted towards my room and took out a box from underneath my bed. I opened it up and took out two skulls. I placed them on my bed and smiled. Even if I said I hated them... I couldn't help but love them also. "I did this so we can be together forever... Papa... Mama..." I whispered. The skulls belonged to my father and mother. ~ It seemed like hours had passed but really it was only 4:15. "Wish time could go faster..." I muttered. I laid down on the couch, a little gloomy. I lied to Aki about my parents. He also forgot that one time. The first time we actually met. It wasn't long ago. Maybe a few years ago. I shook my head. Now wasn't the time to remember it. I should just relax. Everything tonight had to be perfect. Or else who knows what will happen.
Part 23 After doing absolutely nothing during the past hours it was finally near 8. "7:50... Time to go." I said, grabbing the bag and headed out the door. After a short walk I smelled a victim. I followed their scent and spotted a young girl with brown hair and sea blue eyes. Around the age of 13 or 14. I knew it was 8 when the full moon came into full view. I felt my fangs come out and I smirked, quickly running behind the girl. "Have a nice eternal sleep..." I whispered softly in her ear before biting her. She slumped down onto the floor before she could even react. I unzipped the bag and took out the hatchet, hacking away at her body. I had to make this look like a normal murder. Humans couldn't find about vampires. When I was done with her, she was a bloody mess. I shook my head, knowing I still had more victims left. I put the hatchet away, zipping the bag up before running away with my full speed. In no later than a minute I found my next victim. A somewhat young man. Probably around 20. Blonde hair and orange eyes. First time I've ever seen someone like that. In a split second he was my second meal. I wiped the blood away from my mouth and took out the machete. I sliced his arms, legs, and face. Putting the weapon away, I searched for my third meal. Spotting a 12 year old girl, I bit her neck and took out my katana. Slicing her head off, I grinned. "Child you just lost the game." I said in a sing songy voice, softly enough that no one would hear me. I didn't feel any remorse or regret when I killed them. This time when I was awakened...it was different. The last time this happened it wasn't like this. Going for the fourth meal, I felt a hand on my shoulder. "It's time to go." the voice whispered coldly in my ear. I immediately knew who it was. "Yano..." I hissed. "Correct." he smirked. I shook my head violently. "I'm not going." I said. I didn't say that because I wanted my meal. I said it because I didn't want to leave Aki. "Too bad. Lets go my puppet." he sneered, yanking me away. "No I don't want to." I said angrily. While we were fighting, I didn't notice that someone was standing not far away. He was shocked to see what had happened. "M-Mizuno?!" he stuttered. I looked at him and cursed. It was Aki.
Ok this story is coming to an end soon. I think. Im pretty sure you guys won't expect the ending. Part 24 Aki's P.O.V. I walked around, wanting the nice cool air of the night to calm me down. What was I going to say to Mizuno tomorrow? The only thing I heard was crickets as the wind blew slightly. I knew what I was going to do. I should just say it to Mizuno right now. I started heading towards her house, each step making me a bit nervous. Halfway towards her house, I smelled something. It smelled like...blood. "What's that Yano guy doing?!" I whispered angrily. I ran towards the scent and at first I saw a pile of blood. A closer look and I saw it was a young girl. He had hacked her to death. I walked down the road, trying to find somewhere to throw up when I came across another body. A man, and he had been sliced. "What the hell?!" I said confused. How many people had he killed? "I guess more than one..." I muttered, running down the road. Then there it was. Another person had been killed. A young girl with her head cut off. I was mortified. The next scene broke my heart. Yano and Mizuno were fighting but Yano didn't have blood on his hands. Mizuno did. "M-Mizuno?!" I stuttered. She looked at me and cursed. It was an awkward silence until she finally spoke up. "It's not what you think!" she said. I shook my head violently. I noticed she had red eyes instead and had fangs. She was a vampire. "Y-you're a monster!" I said a little scared. All the feelings I had for her just seemed to fade away. "You're wrong! I... I..." she stuttered, trying to find the right words to say. I backed away and ran far away from her. I could hear her calling my name but I ignored it. There was no way in hell I was going to talk to that damn monster again! ~ Mizuno's P.O.V. "Damn it! Damn it! Damn it!" I yelled. Yano quickly grabbed my arm and teleported us somewhere. That's right. I had forgotten he can teleport. "That's the reason why you can't love humans Mizuno. Once they find out who you really are than..." he trailed off, not wanting to finish his sentence. I looked down, feeling a tear roll down my cheek. Even if he hated me, I'll still love him. But I had to make sure Yano was on my side. "You're right... I'm sorry for doing something so foolish." I mumbled. He smiled and gave me a hug, making me want to throw up. "It's alright. Now come on let us go home." he said softly. "Wait." I said softly. He looked at me a little confused. "What's wrong?" he asked. "Um.. even if he hates me tomorrow can I come back and uh say good bye properly?" I asked with a slight smile on my face. He sighed and gave in. "Alright. But only once. Now lets go. We really must get going." I nodded and grabbed the bag, following him. I could get my other things tomorrow.
Part 25 I stayed up all night, hoping the next day would come. I needed to talk to Aki. It's like I was obsessed. I laid down on the bed and sighed. We were at a house that Yano had "found". It seemed like forever until the sun came up. I quickly ran towards the kitchen and saw Yano sitting at the table. He was reading a newspaper and a cup of coffee was on the table in front of him. I ignored him and grabbed an apple, taking a huge bite out of it. After finishing it, I tossed away the core and ran out the door. "I'll be getting my things!" I yelled before he could stop me. I pulled the hood over my head and ran towards the town. It took almost 4 hours to get there since we were so far away. But I was running so fast that I got there in 2 hours. I entered my house got a small bag, stuffing my parent's skulls in there. I grabbed a kitchen knife, just in case and put it in my pocket. It fit quite well actually. I looked at the clock before running out the door towards the school. It was 8:00. Everyone should be studying. By the time I got there it was really quiet and of course everyone was in their classrooms. I sighed and looked around. My eyes fell upon these two people near the doors to the first floor hall. It was one of Ichigo's followers, Kagome Alamo, and Aki. And they were kissing. "That *****...how dare she?!?!" I whispered angrily to myself. ~ Aki's P.O.V. It all started like a normal day. Except different in a way. I was terrified when I walked to school. I was scared to face Mizuno. Luckily she didn't show up and the first 30 minutes of school was peaceful. Asking to go to the bathroom, I got out of my seat and headed there. After doing my business and heading out, I was stopped by one of Ichigo's friends. "Can I talk to you?" she asked, leading me outside before I could even answer. She pulled me closer and whispered in my ear. "Don't ever hang out with Mizuno. She is just a little retard. She always talks to herself and hangs out alone. A loser right?" I couldn't really reply. I just shrugged my shoulders and looked down. That's when she made me look at her and she kissed me. I was shocked. I didn't know what to do but kiss back. It had only been like a minute when I noticed a figure standing nearby. My eyes widened in fear as I cursed in my head. It was Mizuno and it looked like she was pissed off.