A Changing Personality FEEDBACK

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *I_Got_Da_Swagger (01), Jun 13, 2011.

  1. Cos I was completely grossed out. If I said 'I love guy private parts' u would be like eww so yeah.
    Gtg have fun doing um…'stuff'
     
  2. No i wouldn't. You were created by God to feel that way.
     
  3. Ok…well I'm gonna kill this conversation. Its going a bit too far.
     
  4. There might be a download today. Depends on the weather :D
     
  5. There's a few errors but otherwise it was great.
     
  6. Loved this chapter
     
  7. Thanks guys. And ok thanks feth, but I can't change it. I'm on my iPod, although I'll be sure to have a look.

    I didn't particularly like this chapter, but whatever. At least you guys did, and thats all that matters.
     
  8. I'm not that big a fan of this one either...
     
  9. Dosnt say y she screamed unless she recognized him or he looked really evil..
     
  10. She screamed because…

    Good question. I hadn't really thought about that.

    Oh yeah, I remember. She screamed cos he got hold of her. Wouldn't you scream or shout if someone suddenly grabbed you?

    And thanks feth, I like honest opinions :) they're not always nice, but it's good to know what my readers really think, not just what they say to make me feel good.
     
  11. HOPEFULLY, I will have the next chapter up tonight! I had a nice break from writing yesterday, so I'm good to go, and looking forward to it.

    X QBT X
     
  12. I just love the book.One little favour could u post on my wall when u rite ur chapters?
     
  13. I'm sorry! -hides- its really short! And FH is gonna kill me, he hates Blake. Say a prayer for me, when I'm under stone :p.

    So, hope you enjoyed it. I thought I should get a bit of player-ism in there, as Blake/Lailah are/were players. So they just basically used each other. You can kinda work out what they did 'last night' :p

    And sure I will sandy, you're one of y fav readers :)
     
  14. It's ok I mean not allot in there but still
     
  15. That may be but u had her scream.. THEN he grabbed her..
     
  16. No cos he grabbed her, and then made her be quiet. I said she screamed, because it's a cliffhanger.

    If I said:

    But then I screamed, as somebody had grabbed me.

    It's not nearly as effective as:

    Suddenly I screamed.

    Is it?

    Lol.
     
  17. Why would she call Blake? She shoulda called nick.. I'm sure that now when she sees nick she will feel all guilty.. If she wants blake.. She needs to do something about nick!! But nick is my favorite and I don't want her to leave him but I want her with Blake also....... I'm sorta confused.