We don't know for sure, but there's probably going to be at least 8 chapters, as there are 8 different equipment!
Writing is good. Story is decent. Over all it is crap. But it can be fixed. This killing issue in this story, like all of the other ones, is that it has too much "Telling" and not enough "Showing"
Trying to be less of an ass, I'm going to explain myself and hopefully you listen and learn. Or, whoever wrote this listens and learns and goes on to be a better story writer. This is just one example of "Telling" The best way to tell the difference between telling and showing is this. Is this something you would see through a camera. *He sprinted to a rack as far away from the entrance as he could reach in time and crouched down behind it.* That wasn't an action scene from a camera's pov, that was you telling us what he did. Showing would paint more of a picture: *The skin between Kish's eyes wrinkled as he cursed to himself. Turning on his toes he ran down the steps, skipping three between each step before landing on the ground. A chill of urgency tickled from his ears and down his neck as he sprinted down the cellar. Each step was soft to the ground, almost gliding through the room, his back arched forward and he pumps his arms to strengthen his stride. After the thirtieth rack he planted his right foot on the ground and before he fully came to a stop, he kicked off and dived between one of the rack, rolling on the ground before coming to a halt. All in time for a light to shine, outlining the door, as it creaked open. The sound of the hinges creaked as the smells of the kitchen seeped into the dusky wine cellar.* ^ Not greatly written but it's an example of what showing is compared to telling. It almost always takes more words to show than tell but it makes the story so much better. Now telling a story isn't bad when it comes to writing but you don't want to go overboard with it like you do. In these stories you explain the looks of people and places in one sweep which is okay, sometimes, though not all of the time. It's does not matter what the place looks like or how the person looks like. It is also good to allow the reader some imagination room in story telling. Don't describe the entire city from the first paragraph. Just describe it through the eyes of the PoV character throughout their time in the city. With people, you don't have to tell us what they look like, fully, the first time we see them. You want to do it soon but you can pepper it in through the next several paragraphs. Take it how you will. I we have our issues grant but this is as close as I can be to objecting to something of yours and actually giving quality advice without being mad about it. Stories need a lot of work in the actual writing process and describing things. But the story seems interesting. (I can't read paragraphs upon paragraphs of telling. I tried here, I failed.)
I think you are in to something grant, too bad i just scroll down fast , but you should do some comic strip with drawins
Let me go into pimd and get one. (Doctors notes are crystals in pimd for those who have avoided that "place")