The only zombie story ive ever actually liked is The Last of Us... I consider the enemies in the game zombies, I don't think they're undead, but still.
I love that game lol. They're undead but something else is controlling the brain. If they were alive, they would grow fungi
Day one of outbreak 12:17am Stepping outside to the frigid night, I locked the door. The apartment complex was very quiet. It worried me a bit. Some weird things are going on. My thoughts were interrupted by gun fire. I could hear more of those things attracted by the noise. Maybe someone was in trouble. I drew out my switchblade and crouch-walked over to the noise. The noise became louder as I walked in a backyard of a house. I threw my backpack over the fence then leaped up hanging one the edge. I pulled myself up and drop to the floor. In the small backyard there was a picnic table and a glass door leading into the house. One of them was pounding at the door. I crouched-walk over to and clutched him from behind. With my elbow, I lifted up his chin and jabbed my blade into his neck, blood spurting like a water fountain. His muscles relaxed and dropped to the floor. I softly slid the door open; walking inside. The gunshots have stopped when I came. The cupboards and drawers were open, laundry was lying on the floor. There was blood on the wall which frightened me. Something grabbed me from behind, similar how I grabbed the guy outside. It squeezed its gripped and pressed its body against mine, pushing my head with its hand. Whatever it was, it was gonna strangle me. My survival instincts kicked in. I stomped his foot with all my might. It loosened its grip and bit its arm it let go, yelping. I turned around, pulled out my revolver and pulled back the hammer, aiming through the sight. It was just a man. He had a blonde hair and blue eyes. His skin was light. He was wearing a white sweatshirt with dark blue jeans. Cussing and looking at his bite mark, he looked up at me. "You aren't one of them, are you?" "I don't think those things outside are that smart" I said, lowering my weapon. "Do you know what's going on?" I added. "I think it's uh.. Some sort sickness. If you get bit by one, you turn into them." I shuttered. "We have to get out of here, this place won't last long" "Army's setting up defenses up in the northern part if the city. Once we get there, we'll be safe." We went to the backyard, walking past the dead person I dealt with earlier we jumped over the fences and began walking.
Guys, the next chapter will be a lot longer and more action, a new character, and some learning about the characters.
It's getting slightly better. The biggest fault is your transition from place to place. He hears some gunshots and the next paragraph he's jumping a fence. Way too quick.