Found this story kinda interesting tho u got a bad taste in writing. Keep on going please. Dnt mind abt Wat others said . Keep up the good work. Bump
This is my last story for today... I went to lunch until a popular girl went to me smiling. "Do you want to sit with us?"She said still smiling. "Uhm..Sure."I said smiling and following her. "Your sitting on my seat."I turned around and saw Ashley and Britney. "But the girl said I can sit here."I said guilty and turned around to the girl that invited me. "Just go sit somewhere else."Ashley said shooing me,but I didn't stand up. "No.You boss me around too much."I said angrily.She looked at the girl that invited me and got angry. "Ugh!Just watch."She said walking away to another table,so I turned around afraidly. "I'm sorry."The girl said trying to smile,so I smiled. "It's okay."I said still smiling carefully,and we went back to eating our lunch carefully and talking about the dance. ______________________________ (Ashley's Pov) "I can't believe she just disobeyed me."I turned to Britney angrily,but not really angry. "I know."She said smiling. "Stop smiling!Just watch what we're going to do tomorrow."I said smiling evilly,and went to another table where Joshua was sitting. "Excuse me Josh."I said innocently smiling at him,so he turned around and stood up and went to Amy's table and never looked at me,and looked bak at Britney. "She's totally going to get it."I snapped my finger angrily at Amy and Joshua.Britney was still smiling so I snapped her out of it and ate talking about my plans with Britney ad my friends
Please fix up your writing. I can't understand without proper punctuation, Adjectives used correctly, etc.
Never said I was boss and don't plan on leaving this thread. Feedback is unconditional, to a certain extent. I've done nothing wrong for you to tell me to leave.
Next day,Ashley pretended to have a new boyfriend so Joshua would be jealous and take her back.Her pretened new boyfriend had blonde hair,blue eyes,and tan skin.Ashley found Amy and Joshua talking at lunch,so she turned around to her boyfriend. "Pretend your my new boyfriend,okay?"She said looking at him in the eyes. "I heard what you said yesterday."He said confusingly looking at Amy and Joshua. "Okay,walk proudly,too."Ashley said looking back at Amy and Joshua. "Okay,I get it."Her pretend boyfriend said and walked proudly to the popular table,and Joshua saw,but he kept talking to Amy and ignored Ashley and her boyfriend.Ashley was super angry and stood up to get her lunch with her boyfriend. "I can't believe he ignored me."She said turning to her boyfriend. "So what do we do?"He asked getting his lunch after Ashley. "Uhm..Let's pass by them when we're done eating."Ashley said going back to their table. "Okay."Her boyfriend said following her. They were done and so Ashley and the boyfriend passed by Amy and Joshua.Amy and Joshua stood up too to go to class.Amy was looking at the boy and Ashley strutting to class.When they got there,Mrs.Wheeler was looking for decorations. "I thought we were going to do the decorations yesterday after lunch."Amy said picking up decorations on the floor,so Mrs.Wheeler stopped. "Oh.The schedule was changed to today after lunch."Mrs.Wheeler said helping Amy pick up the decorations,so Joshua helped and Ashley saw,so she helped too. "Thank you Mrs.Wheeler."Amy said appreciating for the help. "Okay,I found some decorations."Mrs.Wheeler said opening the drawer on her desk and taking out the decorations,while Amy,Joshua,and Ashley did the decorations for the dance.Ashley saw that Joshua wasn't jealous of her getting a pretend boyfriend,and the boyfriend went to class. ______________________________ Wall me if I hve mistakes
(Amy's PoV) Joshua,Ashley,and I were really busy!It was almost five o'clock for the dance,and we were almost done on the decorations.Mrs.Wheeler was home changing and some kids in another class volunteered to help us do the decorations.There was a silence between us,but Ashley distracted. "Amy,I'm so sorry for insulting you."She said apologizing to me. "It's okay."I said not believing her for apologizing. "So...Anybody going to the dance?"Joshua asked looking at me grinning. "I am."I answered stopping to put the decorations. "Me too."Joshua said smiling.I went down off the chair and Joshua did the same.We were finished when Mrs.Wheeler came back to see how we were doing. "Were doing great Mrs.Wheeler."I smiled at her quickly.She looked at these decorations that were put up in the classroom. "Can you please stack the chairs into big to small?"She asked smiling at Joshua,Ashley,the other kids,and me. "Sure."I said already fixing the chairs to big and small.We were done when I looked at the clock.It was four fifty,and we decided we have better be changing. "Thank you for volunteering."Mrs.Wheeler said thankfully. ______________________________ (Still Amy's PoV) I didn't know what to change to,so I just put on a blue flouncy V dress,pink cutout boots,and a gold owl pendant necklace,and a little bit makeup.I fixed my dress and went downstairs and suddenly thought about Sean,so I called out for him. "Sean!"I shouted but he didn't answer back.I went downstairs to his room but I didn't see him there,so I called him. "Hello?"Sean said. "Sean,where are you?"I asked panicky. "What??I can't hear!"Sean yelled through the phone."I'll go outside!" "Sean,where are you?"I asked still panicky. "I'm at a party."He answered. "Since when?"I growled. "Since four o'clock."He answered probably looking at his watch. "Oh...Well you might get drunk."I laughed hard. "I got to go.See you later."Sean said hanging up.I looked at my golden watch.Oh sh-t.It was almost five. ______________________________ I'll put the new characters on Friday..