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"NO!" Lady say, sitting upright! She falls back onto her back and falls asleep again.
I did that with battle camp: the rebellion. Each chapter was its own. I WANNA MAKE A CHARACTER!!!!
That's not my strongest point in story making. All my characters seem to get to know each other too fast also.
Yay! My story! Well, your story but.... You know what I mean!
Lady momentarily awakens to the noise. She smiles at Star sleepily. "Youweposedtoissmeh." she says, her words slurred. Then she falls back to...
Yeah, it was the first chapter.
I read it for the first time and it's good! Only problem I can see is that the characters got to know each other a tad bit too fast. I do that...
Lady giggles and sways to the imaginary music. The caffeine begins to wear off and Lady crashes. She lays her head on Star's shoulder and closes...
"Star, please dance with me?" Lady begs.
Yes I did! I wrote it at school then transferred it onto my ipod! I hate doing that! You have to look at the paper, then the iPod screen, then...
Lady continues trying to make Star dance with her. "I feel like dancing! Lets dance, Star!"
Awesome! This is a really cool story!
Yay! Rejoice!
Lady walks up to Star. "Dance with me!" she says, taking his hands.
Oh, okay
Yes... What?
I spotted uno mistake. Please point out my others!
Hmmm... Me shall try and spot me's mistakes...
It's pretty good, only do a bit more showing, not as much telling.
Nao? And what errors??? Not that I edit my story or anything... I should start doing that. I didn't exactly read the first book, sorry! I'll...