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Haha bastion can't have fun
Good start. But don't tell readers to read something. It makes it seem like he's writing the story. If that's what your trying to do then sorry....
K chapter 4 out. It's a lot of dialogue and I know it can get confusing. Plz try to understand and watch quotation marks. They will help out with...
CHAPTER FOUR I was pacing back and forth. "We got no-where!! Dianna and Bastion dead and nothing better than when we started." "It's not that...
Chapter 4 coming soon
Yeah it does. Sorry guys. However it's just my first story. I'll have more expirience for my second
Yeah I meant to do that in chapter one. Can't update Now cuz I barely ever able to get on comp. There is so much I left out
Bump
At least gives me ideas and let's me know people are reading. Plus it bumps up thread which shows more people to read it
Nah crim. I like feedback.
I read all 7. Number 7 and number 5. My 2 favorites
Ok. I was trying to think what fit best and where. I coulda used more detail in beginning of chapter where alex helped Riann and Amber run to building
K I joined on pal
Ok. I'll join if I'm allowed
But I will try to add more detail. Thank you for feedback
I could make it 100 pages if I tried but it would be boring for u all to read lmao
Yeah I understand. I didn't know how much detail to put cuz it's a story on KaW so I was just gonna try to make it kinda short. Not 100 pages.
Wait bastion. If I have an idea for a story and I'm in iWrite Co. I gotta get em to vote on it?
Lolking tell me what u think. They used powers more in this
Gonna keep it coming. It's 11 PM here so idk if I'll get Chapter 4 in tonight