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Was Laela too backroundy?
@ tigaz? As I said before, you are not old enough to have the insight required to understand that not all stories are perfect. I am not PMSing,...
Hmm yelling? Compare "you have a cliché ending," To "You suck! Stop writing now you bitchy little eleven year old!" I do not yell
I'm so sorry Zaln! I forgot a weapon! make something up, I know how annoying it is to have two different posts.
Name: Laela Race: Halfling (human/elf) Age:19 Class: Mage. If mages are not allowed assassin Appearance: Short and thin, people call her twiggy,...
Hmm... Need more b4 I will decide. Good beginning, if not a little cliché
Ty guys it really is the end this time though, gonna start on a new story
So? If I'm not hard on you, you won't learn. Most of your readers are probably around 12 or 13 and don't have the insight required to criticize...
Prologue one and two UP!
Prologue Part 1 The NLHs marched bravely and stoically into the facility, one of the last remaining that they had not torn down. They waited...
Lolz it's a "happy" ending, something kids seem to need to write nowadays. I won myfirst writing competition at the age of 10 with the most...
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exactly
This book cannot be published, at the end of the line it would be so changed... Plus this world does not need a poorly written version of twilight
Nope, no action or sex, mostly mushy stuff