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Chapter 8 Feasts and Friends Elina Everyone seemed to perk up at the mention of food, and went back to chatting with the person next to me. I...
Your sentance structure, word variation, and flow need work. Your writing is too choppy.
Vocabulary, sytax etc.
Too many points of view- this is very confusing. It's a good rule of thumb to have around 2 PoVs per story. Also you need to work on the style...
That way we wont lose track of anyone
We should compile a hitlist for all enforcers/guardians to see. We could update and post it every few pages. Give me the names and # of strikes...
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread Cutie: we made them up to protect our writers and readers from spam. You don't wanna follow them? Prepare to get...
This does belong in this section because it is informing the Fan Fiction guardians of a new HQ. It isn't spam, and it doesn't use excessive...
I will try to have more up tomorrow. If you haven't noticed I've been gone
Chapter 7 is up. Zaln and Sil'lar and Roxanne are mentioned. The rest of you will show up in chapter 8
Chapter 7 Gussied up and Gesticulating Elina The next six hours were pure and utter hell. Full of strangely dressed people clicking their...
GlooMi quietly walked into the cafè, utterly disoriented and very confused
I'll try and write some tomorrow.
@ Feather: Pls what? I cannot stand that name. It is pure bile in the back of my throat
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread Seriously
@ Feather. I really Really REALLY hate the name Alexandria. No offense. Can I change it to Allynsía?
My next chapter is up for anyone who reads
In the dinner scene which will be next chapter or the one after, all characters that will be in the story will show up. This is your last chance,...
Chapter 6 Revelations Elina The days became monotonous. Wake up, eat, train, rest, then train some more. Although there was a new match every few...
Excellent description and voice. I look forward to reading more .