Separate names with a comma.
So you're going to turn it into a whole story?
Opps nvm...
What's advanced cheesemuffin syndrome?
Hey isn't that the same one that you showed before?
Lol actually I wear glasses
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@Karl Are you giving me a nickname too? @Paradox I'll read it!
Second paragraph. The word "lieing" is should be "lying" right?
Ooh I figured out what I'm going to do when I finish Atlantric!!! I'm going to play around with some short stories!!
Don't trash, keep going!
You are dirty minded Karl... Unfortunately, because I'm nearing the end I have a lot of planning to do for it so I might not post until the end...
My advice: Take a break and go outside. A two-three days break should do the trick. Though for me it ended up being two weeks because I got...
Oh sorry! I guess I misread!
I just skimmed it so I can't tell you much about the content but one thing you really need is to use the return/enter key. It's really hard to...
Pretty good but for the first POV in chapter 1, Jason's thoughts didn't make me think he was 19(made me think he was younger.) and his and Mia's...
Eh? What battle?
Very interesting. But you made a spelling mistake.
Change that my to mine and paradox's* Made a mistake there
Revolution gets more feedback than my story For The Love Of Cookies cheese. I don't know why people don't leave feedback on that story...the only...
Great chapter, I didn't notice you wrote more of it The only thing is the whole jumping around from setting to setting thing, it gets a bit...