Separate names with a comma.
Second suggestion: Space inbetween dialogue. It's hard to tell who's talking. Ex: "You must be careful in how you handle magic," The sorceress...
I'm tempted to see a sequel for Battle Camp, but I also really like sign-ups. Oh, that's a hard one...
The last one sounds interesting Possible Title: Secrets from the Blue
Chapter 10: A Plead for Help Delta set the teacher’s hair on fire, again, much to the amusement of the other classmates in cooking...
*Thumbs Up* :mrgreen: Chapter 10 posted! Hopefully I can get a few more posts out in a week for the fact I have Chapters 11-14 written.
Hmm... I guess I never really knew that. And Chapter Ten will be posted soon I hope. Just need to edit some things here and there, recount my...
-IN- The newcomer, who's name is still unknown, stumbles in. Her usually colorful and flowing robes are torn and splattered with mud. The book...
Bippity, Boppity, Boo! LOL And I can't walk in heels either... I trip over my own feet on flat ground.
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread Ah, that makes more sense. A probably, since the constitution is already on this thread.
Re: KaW Fan Fiction Superthread Maybe change the title to Fan Fiction Constitution/ Index?
Suzanne Collins. Sorry should've clarified. Someone who has a book about them.
-OUT- Sorry for interrupting the roleplay thing but HELP ME!!! I need to do an autobiography/biography book report on someone interesting and...
Aw Smighter, you totally got the Jeaporady song in my head.
*In sports announcer voice.* This game is getting intense! Two fantastic writers, plus two great chess players! The only thing that could make it...
Just like the last chapter... awkward! Still liked the chapter though! :mrgreen: Although if that happened to me I'd probably sue the teacher...
"Very specific there Reg," the newcomer called as she leafed through pages of her book.
I wonder.... :mrgreen:
It got better along the way. A teensy bit more detail would be appreciated too.... Am I allowed to be posting here?
-IN- The newcomer looked up towards the ceiling. "Of all the oddest places I've visited..."
-OUT- lol :lol: :mrgreen: