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It's him!
Meh. 5, I guess. I think you need to space out diologue (is that the right spelling? Lol) in your story. It is daunting to a reader when you see...
I feel like there is too much diolague (is my grammer good enough? :P) in the story, and not enough description. Will post more comments later,...
Seriously. You are rude, and need to learn a lesson. Don't be so pissy when you talk to people. You aren't going to have a whole lot of followers...
I don't see why you posted on my forum "GRAMMAR". I was about to post, "Hey nice story", but i don't care anymore. ;)
Xbox 360!!! Woot woot. I love my xbox, but I think I'm just doing whatever my friends do. Playing online is more for fun to me than anything else....
Keep writing! I will stalk fan fic for the next chapter.
WORMS.
I have been out of school for 3 days. :D
It's interesting. You need to add more. A WHOLE LOT MORE into every event. Not "Oh i climbed a 69 foot wall". It should be something like "I...
I'm free!
(posted twice just for fun... ;P)
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HG 5 C2 Chapter 2 "Isaac." My brother lectured me as I entered our home. My mother was nowhere to be found, "You can't go running off. If you...
Caine, I'm really glad you've decided to write a new, post apocalyptic story. But seriously, please stop being so annoying about it. Trust me,...
It's good. I find it too cliché, like mirroring creation stories or like Caine and Able (or whatever the names are). It is good overall, just me...
Technically peep.
The story's (yes it is spelled like that any unicorns out there) okay. It goes too fast, skips over details, the usual things most writers in...
I honestly have no idea what is happening in your story. There is a vague sense of a plot, but it seems to skip over massive details and...
It's alright. Sprry, i just honestly don't care for most guns.