Re: Useless Tears I see nobody gave constructive criticism, just noobs hating on this and people hating on the noobs. I like the premise of the story. I only read the prologue and last chapter now, but I'll read them all later. I would suggest you review the chapters and correct the grammar. There are times, when you don't keep the verb tense. You jump from past to present, excluding the dialogue, because that should be in the present tense. Also there are parts where you're being reluctant, repeating some words too much, try using synonyms instead. The reading will be more enjoyable that way. Other than that, it's good. Looking forward to more Oh after I posted I realised you could also use a few BB codes, like colour, font or different text size xD Not mixed together making it look like a circus, but something simple, that will capture the attention
Re: Useless Tears I am in device but if I am in pc I'll do And I'll check my story again English wasn't my first language
Re: Useless Tears Neither is mine, so I understand how hard it is to write a story in English. I'm sometimes having problems just with a short explanation, yet again a fiction. Lol Also I liked the old name better. The flaming sword makes me think of an adventure or fantasy. When I saw Useless Tears, I thought it would be someone's life story struggling with depression >.> Not saying it's bad, I just liked the other one better. Also thanks for taking into consideration my opinionī
Re: Useless Tears I just read the first few sentences and this is confirmed to be in major editing X( Gotta fix the end as well...
Re: Broken Blade Same. You pay so well you stupid Noob. I don't think I'll ever stop hitting you. Actually. Not ever. I bet you cry to your clan in less than a week.
Okay, you're not writing correctly at all. You're using past and present tense all mixed together. You can't say she did this, then she does this throughout different parts of the story. You need to be more consistent.