Hey all! I've been feeling guilty because GlooMi has quit sending me her story so I decided to post my angsty teen-ish piece of crap for all to see! Stora said it's good so I guess I'll trust her Please give me any criticism you may have, particularly if my language is too flowery and adjective ridden! (Ive been told that before) Also please inform me of any spelling/grammatical errors you catch. Thanks and here's a link to the story A Raven Among the Doves
It's sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo good.
Wow. That is amazing if Ur still hungry u need to put more up. Or I just might go on a homicidal rampage.
It is one of the better stories I've read in Fan-Fic. You used good descriptive words through most of it, and the plot has interested me so far. I like how you introduce the characters through thoughts, dialogue and actions, not blatantly like many other FF stories. There are a few diction errors and poor choice of wording that detract a bit from the story, but overall it is quite good.
@Chirabbit: GlooMi/Mystique is one of the best writers here. I'd like to see you do better. Really, because right now fanfic is dead.