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I read it and loved it. It wasn't terrible, or at least I thought it wasn't lol. I'm glad you're reposting a better version of it though(: can't...
It sounds interesting. I'm hooked, more please(:
There are several who are against Moose but having more supporters would increase our chances of being heard. That's all I'm saying...
Maybe we should focus our efforts on finding writers and supportive readers who'll help us keep this section alive instead of thwarting Moose...
Yes, we are protective of our little corner(: Because there's all this junk here, it's hard for the people who love writing to shine, and even...
What? I don't understand the point you're trying to make
Warry, I meant that even the scenery wasn't described very well. There's a lot more that could be done, depending on the intention of the writer...
You hooked me in Killer Inside, but this prologue seemed devoid of detail and description. You told us what happened instead of showed us. It's a...
I'm from '10. Most of my old friends are gone as well...
Yes, the real Utho is truly back(:
Can't even contain my excitement, I'm hooked. Amazing as always(:
You are a beautiful writer. That was very..touching. Nicely done(:
I remember..I've been lurking here for a long time
We just need to make this a community again... more than the writing, we need an open community where ppl can talk not just about writing, but...
That was when clans were like families..now that's not always the case. We need good content to keep people interested as well. We have the power...
You guys have to remember that he's been gone and doesn't remember every detail or he may not want to share every detail. Have faith guys...
Glad to see you back(:
It's great(: thank you for allowing us to see the end lol
It sounds a lot better and is more interesting to read. Careful not to switch between past and present tense or you'll confuse the reader. I can't...
I agree it's very descriptive. Kinda feels like you're throwing it all at the reader at once though, since you through a lot of characters out in...