Writing a book!!!

You have no use of quotation marks and the enter/return button. So far, it's horrible.

 

So, you can still use "quotion marks" and
Return :roll:
I'm on an iPod, I'm nearly always on an iPod. Proof: 

 

I'm on an iPod too... look at my story, and thanks para- PROOF: 

 

I wrote all of my stories on an iPhone

 

Um...it's quotation marks not quotion marks. Quotion isn't even a word.

 

Hey everyone, give some heart, let him grow.
I'm providing you with two versions of the story, one with grammar and whatnot fixed, and the other as the original.

Are you ok? WHERE AM I!, AND WHO ARE YOU! My name is Sylthia I found you on the shores. Your on they island KaW. There's no such thing as KaW, TELL ME THE TRUTH! You are not in earth anymore your in the realm of Azurah


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Lol"... Are you okay?" I heard a voice say above me.
LolI immediately sat up, taking in my surroundings and finding nothing familiar, and demanded, "Where am I?! And who are you?!"
Lol"My name is Sylthia, I found you on the shore. You are on the island of KaW," she said softly.
Lol"There's no such thing as KaW? Tell me the truth!" I shouted.
Lol"You are not on Earth (Gaea would sound cooler and is more truthful. And also how would she know he's from earth?!) anymore, you're in the realm of Azurah." She responded.






Don't feel downtrodden, if you put yourself to it, and read many books, you can make a good story. Not a 600 forum page one though.

 

Do you like my revised version? It took a while to transfer it from bad grammar to good... Harder than from a new story...

 

I meant to write: "And finding nothing familiar, I demanded"


Whoops...

 

Shuddup Feather. It is 12:13 AM

 

There's no such thing as KaW,*

 

[ ERRROORRRR ]

 

Not my fault you can't spell

 

I have got my critic color out
Ok. So. First you have no commas, and no quotation marks. As they've pointed out.
Otherwise, keep it coming. :'D
~ Tiggy

 

Just look at my revised story on page one.

 

And add more detail so it makes te story more interesting.
~ Tiggy

 

As I said, look at my revised story on page one...

 

X98. It was a finishing statement -___-

 

As I said, Ahhhhhh.