Hmmm, you had a good start, but you need longer chapters with more explanation. Also your organization is poor
I meant organization of the plot. You come out with a great thought, but then you fall into randomness. Why are they fighting? Who are they? What do they look like? P.S. get a writing app, or write your chapters on notes. It will help when you have a good idea, but can't think of any more so that way you can have full chapters. P.P.S. Ask Lady_Marian for a good name of a writing app if you don't want to use notes. She writes her stories on her iPod. I don't, I use a computer