A scythe flickers in the distance as Aqua runs to find her brother that was chased away by the nightmares. "I must get him back to the black nights..." she says with a grimace remember in the bloody claws and mouthed of the nightmares that attacked them and took Terra. Thats when it all changed... Then she saw them, the nightmares... No not the nightmares, the cursed demon it was only a kid! "Hello! ARE YOU OK!?" she shouted as she ran up with her dirks in her hands. "yes..." he responded as he held aqua's brother's scythe to her throat. "who are you!!!"she screamed in fear. "I am Colin...you are?" "aqua..."she says with a dark tone in her voice.
Should I continue making chapters or quit (I'm makeing new ones either way I just want congregation b4 I post new ones)
This is good. Quite a few gramatical mistakes, but sounds like quite a good storyline. Forgive me if I am wrong, but it sounds a bit like you have copied the title of my story. Only because my story is 'Whispering Clouds'. It just sounds similar, thats all.
Actualy this is an old on my first one was The Wispers of my Scythe But is is easier to write in 3rd person so