Vasilias' Feedback Thread

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by XxTIl-__KING__-IITxX, Feb 21, 2013.

  1. Post feedback about my story here. Will try to post at least 2-3 times a week. Thanks for reading!
     
  2. Oh aren't you cool.
     
  3. Comment #2

    It's interesting... Maybe... Needs more
     
  4. There will be. Just a prologue I wrote up while I was sick today. If I stay home again from school tomorrow, then I will write more.
     
  5. It's really cool so far:p btw did u have a sign up thread or anything for this story?:$
     
  6. Not for this one. I am writing that one too. I like flipping between stories, not focus on just one. Helps stimulate thoughts and **** haha
     
  7. I do that too, whenever I do write I don't write from beginning to end I write whatever comes to mind first them I put all the little parts together. You should see my folders I have so many saved bits of a story, then once I feel it is good I put them all together and add in.
     
  8. Nice! Haha :) nice to see you on KaW, more specifically FF Fiddler haha
     
  9. ;) I'm everywhere lol :D

    Read some of mine sometime, I'd love some critiquing.
     
  10. Re: (dont have a story name yet)

    WHY POST A STORY HERE WHEN YOU DON'T HAVE A NAME FOR IT?

    WHY?
     
  11. If someone says NOT to post on their story thread, then why the **** would someone still do it? Just causes more problems for me, having to ask Drgnblade to move it to this thread. Damn you wannabe swagger guy.
     
  12. Thank you to Drgn for moving it
     
  13. I must apologise 

    But just chill out, seriously. I write 'please use the feedback thread, don't post here' and go on to explain why on my stories, and people still post there, but don't see me throwing a paddy about it.
     
  14. You can ask a mod to move it.
    and its a big deal when you want your stories to look professional, thank you.
     
  15. Professional, without a name?
    So you're saying that my stories don't look professional? Ohh okay then.
     
  16. I never said yours WASN'T professional, I'm just OCD that way. And i dont have a name for a prologue to ame story that I wrote in like 30 minutes.
     
  17. Do you know how hard it is to actually burn a body? o_O

    Not physically, but just as a process to how hot it must get, how long if takes,the evidence it leaves, what it attracts etc. I've done a little research (For my story, KI) and its a little more that a leaf, some gasoline and a few minutes.

    Also, is the body just burned or reduced to ashes? Just curious, I'm kind of a murder/death geek.

    Besides that, it looks good. Maybe more description? And background? But anyways... Keep writing, one I'll definitely follow. :D
     
  18. (This is Vas' alt)
    The body wasn't supposed to turn to ash, just burn away any DNA traces of the assassin that was left ok the body. I could change it a little, make him throw him in an incinerator or something. Maybe... ahh I have the greatest idea.

    Stay tuned.
     
  19. Okay. Well all of that aside, I do quite like the story.