Vanished 

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Malicious-_-Candy (01), Apr 18, 2012.

  1. I'm not really sure whether this is fantastic or not. I do appreciate your feedbacks.
    Beginning:
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Me, Vicky, surfing online as usual. It is no wonder my eye retina is large. Logged in my MMORPG game, waited for it to load.. 99%... 100%! Successfully logged in. I clicked my buddy list, and I saw my guy was online. I whispered to him: Hi, <3...
    He said hi to me with the <3 sign too. Here we go, talking about out romance life, never did I know our perfection relationship was destroying with every word we say..
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    13 April, 2012 03:47 p.m, Cloudy
    Oh my goodness. He's just so cute and funny. But I wonder if he realizes how serious and saddening our fights are? It just hurts me deep down in my heart.. And stabs the bottom of my heart with a sharp knife. A symbol.. We weren't really meant to be..
    VickyAdrenaline
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    So far so good?
     
  2. It's hard to follow. I have no idea what the second part is supposed to be.
     
  3. what the **** is this lol.

    no idea what's going on. hard to follow. sounds more like a casual conversation from one persons point of view.

    not a story