Untitled, any suggestions?

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Requital, Dec 31, 2012.

  1. So I haven't known you long,
    And I struggle to find words for this song,
    Because they escape me
    Because you leave me breathless
    That smile, it radiates like a thousand suns,
    Those eyes, they burn like a million moons,
    Your lips, like a piercing sirens song they draw me ever closer,
    Your laugh, it fills me with butterflies,
    Your tenacity, it inspires me,
    You bring out the best in me,
    You make me want to be a better man,
    I know songs are supposed to rhyme,
    I know songs are supposed to keep rhythm and time,
    But you are the clockwork masterpiece,
    That brings me to me knees,
    I know songs are supposed to have structure and method,
    But you are the method to my madness,
    So this song may not be perfect,
    But it's ok because you are :)
     
  2. I like distortion willy, mind saying why that though?
     
  3. Ooooo I like distortion too
     
  4. Distortion suits this very well. It's like the song is being distorted.
    Nice poem. You should publizh it
     
  5. Thanks for all the feedback!