Here is the Feedback fourm post any comments, good, bad, imporvements. All are accepted! (Please keep comments clean [NO SWEARING!!!!!]. Thank you) Hope you like my story! P.S. The story will be updated every weekend one chapter at a time. 10:00am GMT (UK)
Paragraphs! I feel like you are skipping over details and not describing enough Avoid words like stuff and instead be creative with word choice. I also feel like you have a nice concept, and wish you the best! Keep writing!
Sorry guys that there wasn't a new chapter on Till Life's End. I was busy the whole weekend. (10th and 11th of novermber)
DESCRIBE MORE! Describing more puts me in the narrator's place, and makes the story much more enjoyable to read. For example: The sunshine rose over the hill and I saw him. Vs. The shining rays of light rose quickly over the miniscule hill to unveil the masked stranger stalking me. The second attracts the reader more (I hope) and creates a better image of the tale. You're doing a good job, and your story has lots of potentiall!
Hi everyone. Sorry the story wasn't continued I had some important things to do wich to more time than i thought. It also took my mind off this until i forgot about. But i remembered and came back so look forward for more. Rhythm