"The War For Power" Feedback, Sign Up, and Discussion

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Nlaz, Oct 8, 2010.

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    This is my newest story. It will be in a medieval-set place. So think villages, castles, clans, etc. The story will revolve around my character, Zaln and his band of mercenaries he recruits. This all starts after something tragic happens and he decided to start a mercenary group to get stronger, and eventually take down the strongest kingdom which belongs to one of the prominent Divines.

    So here's the character bio layout:

    Name: 
    Age:
    Gender:
    Element/Property: 
    Personality:
    Appearance/Clothing:

    I will decide the weapon based on the chosen property/element. With the property/element standard, I'm looking for the basic stuff (eg. Wind, Fire, Earth, etc.) but with properties, I also mean Reflection which specializes with mirroring images or bouncing back attacks or possibly Speed which allows for quickened movements and running ability. The properties are the trickiest to come up with, but yet they are the most fun to me because of all the uses for them. So enjoy signing up and I look forward to reading your feedback!

    iZaln iEnterprises™
     
  2. Name: Marian
    Age: 17
    Gender: girl
    Element/property: she can bend light, but her weakness is darkness. She can't create light, just bend it.
    Personality: shy, keeps to herself, hard worker, very loyal to friends
    Appearance: brown curly hair, blue eyes, short for her age, dresses like a boy would, but wears her hair long.
     
  3. It sounds exciting so far!
     
  4. Name:Sutanel
    Age:32
    Power:dark and strength so his powers r stronger when he punches
    Appearance:long black hair,wears regular clothes mostly, but also wears chainmail in battle,6'4, medium muscle build
    Gender:male

    don't know if he can hav one but he also has a sword
     
  5. Great start, as always. I suppose I'll sign up too.

    Name: Amber
    Age:17
    element/property: Fire. Warm air increases her ability to contol/create it, while cool air impairs her ability. Can also teleport within a limited range, but it takes a great amount of energy to do so.
    Personality: Likes to lead, though she mostly finds herself being a follower. Very impulsive, stubborn, short-tempored. Just your average fire shooting, teleporting girl.
    Appearence: True to her name, her eyes are amber. Her hair? What else but a firey red? She keeps it short, just to her shoulders. Average hieght. Her cheeks are dotted with a few freckles. She normally wears a hood, though not always.


    Feel free to change anything you want.
     
  6. Sweet stuff. Also, just one element/property btw, just in case, it wasn't made clear (my bad lolz). Thanks for the feedback.

    iZaln
     
  7. Name: Jonah
    Age: 21
    element/property: His element is Wind. He can bend the air and wind around him at will. He can summon strong winds and tornados at will. This ability allows him to Fly.
    Appearance: short brown hair. 5'11. Athletic build. He has a long scar on his chest from a previous battle. He is cocky but strongly believes in protecting the weak and defenseless.
     
  8. Can you use something like lightning?
    Seth
     
  9. Oh nvm, just noticed the etc.

    Name: Seth
    Age: 33
    Gender: Male
    Element/Property: Seth has a moderate control over lightning. He is able to electrocute someone merely by touching their armor or weapon (if it's made of metal of course) he can also fire bolts of lighning from his hands, but cannot create it (He can only do this durning a storm)
    Appearance: Light leather armor and a leather glove with metal fingertips on left hand(electrocutes people with that hand) regular leather glove on left. Short brown hair, average hight
    Personality
     
  10. Oops, presed submit before I was done.
    Personality; Very similar to a storm. Can be cool, calm and silent, but once the storm brews, there's no stopping it.

    Seth
     
  11. Name:Ubald
    Age:20
    Gender:male
    Personality: wise and quiet but random at times
    Appearance: 6feet 4inches muscular and athletic
    super natural quality: can turn in to light, flexible steel
     
  12. Name: Charlie
    Age: 17
    Gender: Male
    Element/Propety: His ability is speed. He can ran very fast speeds for short bursts, but he has learned to use it to his advantage.
    Personality: Usually calm and collective but, if anger he can't thunk straight.
    Apperance: 5"9, wears a cloth armor for speed, brown hair with green eyes
     
  13. Me!

    Speed and wind
     
  14. Name:GlooMi
    Age:17-20
    Gender:Female
    Element: Ice. GlooMi can create sheets of ice in any weather taking water from the air. The hotter it is, the more energy it takes. As can be expected, she is immune to cold weather, though hot weather makes her grumpy and irritable. In weather that's below freezing, she can "regenerate" but it leaves her vulnerable in the process.
    Appearance/Clothing: She has white hair
     
  15. Sorry posted early
    Appearance: White shoulderlength hair, ice blue eyes and white skin. She wears a white tunic and trousers at all times and does not like cloaks.
    Personality: Bitter and sarcastic, she isn't a very warm hearted person. She treats everyone the same, and never makes any attempt to be more than aquaintances.
     
  16. Name :: Kitsu

    Age :: 17

    Gender :: Female

    Element/Property :: Ice and a slight control over water, can turn water from anything (plants, people, humidity, rain, etc.) into ice. It is weakened by heat.

    Personality :: Like the element she commands, Kitsu is very harsh, cold, an merciless. She is usually calm, cool, and collected, but when angered, she is like fire, ready to lash out. She is lonely, having lived in mainly isolation her whole life.

    Appearance/Clothing :: Kitsu is 5' 4", slim, and very pale, with large, deep violet eyes with small flecks of gold, and long, thick, dark purple hair. Her usual attire is a dark purple corset with a white camisole underneath and black shorts, as well as black boots. She wears a black cloak with silver trim, as well as silver goggles. Her skin is ice cold to the touch.

    (I recommend an ice whip perhaps?)
     
  17. There is a Dork who already posted on the Story thread!
    And whats with that assassins creed 2 thingy?
     
  18. Lolz, looking back, the idea resemblesthe AC2 story, but I'm focusing on actually traveling and more action. There is of course the supernatural powers and I'm planning a broad world-horizon setting. Plus, this would be an original more or less.... Oh and for the record, this is more similar to the main storyline of AC Brotherhood. Lol.

    iZaln
     
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    There's the cover art for the first chapter, The Scythe Wielder. It is just a way of introducing the weapons as a visual presentation, if I can get a picture that is. It's rather hard to get some pictures that properly express an idea. Well there that, and I'm still accepting some people if you wanna sign up. Thanks for reading!

    iZaln
     
  20. Good job zaln can my dude have two hand axes forgot to ask if we could hav weapons