the vampire fang

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Lil-Miss-Happy, Jun 6, 2011.

  1. Last night at 7:45, I was getting ready for bed and suddenly a dark shadow appeared out of no where, I look behind me but nothing was there and someone whispered in my ear "you are the one" ...... That's my blurb ppl
     
  2. Story or RL?:roll:
     
  3. :roll: :roll:
     
  4. Quit posting on her semi story i guess.
     
  5. It's the blurb I'm just starting it
     
  6. It was 1964 when my husband left me, he locked me in a room so I couldn't find him and he wanted me to die. After a few days of hunger I got myself out that room but when I got out the room my house was gone! All that was left was the room that I was in and I wondered why I didn't remember any of it. One year later life slowly went on, I now live with my mum and dad but everyday I wonder why my husband locked me in that room. As my dad works for the newsagents we get free news papers, I was looking for a house that had one room spare. Everyday I search until Friday the 13th of may 1965, the house was very old and tatty but it looked like an adventure waiting to be discovered. I went to the house and knocked on the big lush brown door, a tall man opened the door. "I see that you must be here for the room little one" the man said in a deep voice, "why yes I am" I tried to sound as nice as u could be. He let me step in the old, haunting house and he must of went to talk to the master of the house, I stood there waiting and glancing around the massive hall, I was amazed it look so old but nice, haunting but adventurous. I turned around to see someone with golden blonde hair that could blow in the wind and look even better! But then with amazement I recognised that face, he did a big gasp and stood there with horror and covered his mouth and nose, as if I smelt bad so I smelt my self and I smelt of flowers. He said to the man who let me in "it's her she's the one" and they both looked at me...

    Wc=writers comment
    Wc= that was my first bit I know it was short but I'm short on time at the minute next bit will be out soon ty if u read this love u world xx
     
  7. I loved it one of best stories I read
     
  8. Btw, did u check if the man had a


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  9. I found one place where you say "u" not 'you'.
    Speech has a new line.
     
  10. Good so far