The survial tales from Hale Valley high FEEDBACK!

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 28, 2011.

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  1. Hi guys,
    It's Han (AGAIN!)

    This is where you can post feedback or chat about my story!


    Love,
    Han x
     
    #1 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 28, 2011
  2. I really didn't mean to make two of these I thought the other one hadn't posted :S


    Han x
     
    #2 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 28, 2011
  3. It's so good so far pls post the next bit!!!!:):):):) I'm so happy cz my characters the lead yee buddy lmfaoo
     
    #3 *babygurl2112 (01), Jun 28, 2011
  4. Pretty good intro but I don't recommend doing it for chapters.(The format u used) Noticed some spelling mistakes otherwise it's good.
     
    #4 Storallelite, Jun 28, 2011
  5. Yeah, I'd checked it and checked it again but kept on messing it up :(.
     
    #5 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 28, 2011
  6. Try reading outloud it's the best way to catch mistakes
     
    #6 Storallelite, Jun 28, 2011
  7. Posted chapter 1
     
    #7 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 29, 2011
  8. Oh wow haha! Nice chapter, seems like im a super womanizer xD

    iZaln
     
    #8 Nlaz, Jun 29, 2011
  9. Not bad
     
    #9 Storallelite, Jun 29, 2011
  10. Lol, yeah Zen has two love interests maybe three I don't know

    Love,
    Han x
     
    #10 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 29, 2011
  11. Thanks storallite


    Lve,
    HN X
     
    #11 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 29, 2011
  12. Lol just write Stora. Less chance of spelling my name wrong
     
    #12 Storallelite, Jun 29, 2011
  13. I look like a player... Ah okay! woohoo xD

    Just put: Stoaranasaurusrexianlittiorasholitianpaperhiizalnwashereandimprettycool. Thats a good name for her.

    iZaln
     
    #13 Nlaz, Jun 29, 2011
  14. Ok Stora and I'm sorry I spelt it wrong... Sniff....

    Love,
    Han x
     
    #14 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 29, 2011
  15. @Zaln that's one long name...
    @Hannah (Can I call u that?) It's ok :)
     
    #15 Storallelite, Jun 29, 2011
  16. @stora
    It sure is a long one, isnt it?

    iZaln
     
    #16 Nlaz, Jun 29, 2011
  17. Yeah you can Stora, I would change my username to Han but I don't have the nobility points


    Love,
    The girl watching the Tennis, Han x
     
    #17 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 29, 2011
  18. @Uh huh and one I don't like lol
    @Hannah Well quests are the slow way to getting nobility
     
    #18 Storallelite, Jun 29, 2011
  19. Going to go work on the survial tales

    Bye!
    Love,
    Han x
     
    #19 *HannahMarie55 (01), Jun 29, 2011
  20. Bye
     
    #20 Storallelite, Jun 29, 2011
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