The Story Of My Labels ...

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *-xx-RedSkull-xx- (01), Apr 16, 2014.

  1. My Poem:

    My life started out as me in the hospital.
    My mom holding me.
    As I became her world she became mines.
    Thats only the first stage of my life.
    Then it came to my first word ?
    Mom ?
    Dad ?
    No ... I was just a tad off im not normal.
    Instead of a complete normie.
    I decided to cut the act young.
    My first word was not mom.
    Dad.
    Cat.
    Dog.
    It was Hungey.
    Im not fat.
    Im not skinny.
    So before you label.
    Hear me out.
    Part 3 Kindergarten:
    It turns out ... Im quiet and shy.
    Anti social ?
    No .
    Just shy /.\
    So before you label me.
    Hear me out.
    Part 4 MIDDLE SCHOOL
    It was a new beginning.
    Boys.
    Popularity.
    Parties.
    But not to me ...
    That was just words.
    Im not weird ...
    So before you label .
    Hear me out.
    Part 5 Highschool
    This was Normal for everybody
    But to me .
    A fresh start.
    This is the time for a new me.
    I dress differently.
    I talk differently.
    I address things differently.
    But im not late or weird.
    So before you label me.
    Hear me out.
    Part 6 COLLEGE
    It was frat parties.
    Living young.
    Hippies.
    I wasnt normal
    But i wasnt odd either.
    Before you label me.
    HEAR ME OUT.
    Part 7 Life.
    This is where my life has begun.
    My time.
    I dont keep up with others time.
    I follow mines.
    Im not a timer.
    Im a clock.
    And once it struck life.
    It was time.
    Before you label.
    Hear me out.
    Part 8 My Deathbed
    Im successful
    Im a leader
    Im wealthy
    Even though i seemed late weird and awkward.
    You still shouldve heard me out.
    You do things when your ready.
    Not when the world's Ready.
    Thats Why Im A Leader .
    Even though its at the end.
    Its in the story of my labels.

    ( ps feel free to give me advice and give constructive criticism it would help alot )
     
  2. Interesting to say the least. Pretty good. Was it a poem or a song or a story or what? But it was decent I guess.
     
  3. Need some spelling changes and maybe some more grammar. Overall not bad.