The soldier feedback

Good start. But don't tell readers to read something. It makes it seem like he's writing the story. If that's what your trying to do then sorry. Cuz I know sometimes writers write from that perspective. Other than that good

 

Oh boy. I can't read it, or I doubt anyone can, unless you add grammar and punctuation.

 

Yes just add punctuation. It splits things up and is nice. Plus make sure grammar and spelling are correct. However u will have a few spelling errors. It's called life

 

I understood the words the,i,and,an, and of

 

Hi