Sora waited for the strike he knew would come his sweat covered hands threatening to drop his sword altogether but it wouldn't make a difference unless he could escape.....now.Suddenly a shadow like creature grabbed him from behind, the last thing he saw befor he subcomed to unconsiousness was a dark creature dragging him into the darkness. He awoke in a room.....well room isn't the name more of a circle platform high above with darkness spreading around suddenly a door apeared and a voice wispered to him " you are the..... One who will lock .....the door to..." suddenly before the voice could finish he was pulled towards the door as it opened.
Haha this reminds me of a game called kingdom hearts! But anyways I like your descripsion! But u shouldadd somthing to really make the reader want more leave it suspenceful make them want it like a drug.
Sora awoke in a thatched treehouse on the castaway islands his home for now he planned to sail away to a different world with his friends roxas and kauri (pardon the copyright)
Sora heard someone below "kairi!" he thought silently he quickly climbed down the ladder "can you go get some things for the raft?" "sure" he said we need 5 logs probably from the cave". Sora quickly set off striding across the gold sand and crystal clear water he leaped into a small hole then fell into the cave itself covered in drawings carved in the rock by him and kairi his attention was drawn to one on particular it was a picture of roxas with a sword in soras chest
Ryandon this is annoying me no offence but this is exacly like kingdom hearts u should come up with somthing origanal