Please note this is a trail, depending on feedback, I shall continue or not Here lies a story, in which, may seem a normal one! But there is a very mystical secret beneath hidden in it all! In which a young man named Grimmitt, just a normal villager, sets out to discover, he gains vital things in the process, will he gain what he needs and unearth this secret? It seemed like a normal day in the village of Valuxen, the water in the stream rippled, in which even the most stressed would be relaxed by the gentle sound, the farmers animals where grazing as happily as could be.. And the people, well.. Lets say! They were just keeping up with the daily routine. Apart from one young man, who was quiet the troublemaker, but yet, was loved by virtually everyone. After a hard days work for the villagers, when the sun slowly disappeared, and the moon shortly rising. Unexpected events started to happen, the farmers cattle were savaged one night, shops getting burgled another. The villagers where more than concerned. So, as any normal villager would do, they reported the horrible events. But, the troublemaker, Grimmitt, thought he'd try take matters into his own hands, was he right to do so? So, as the night fell once again on the trouble village off Valuxen, with every soul asleep, resting there precious bodies, Grimmitt, snook out of his house, and glared around the village, but unaware, the guards were out! So around the village Grimmitt snook, until all a sudden... "Oi you! Stay there!" Grimmit had been seen by the guards! He quickly tried to flee. "We know you're here" claimed one off the guards. Now, with the young man being very smart, it's a shame he was troublesome. But he used his brains, he quickly, without hesitation, threw a rock at a stall that had empty boxes neatly stacked upon them, obviously attracting the guards away from himself. "He went this way! I heard a stall get vandalised!" Proclaimed one of the guards. "Haha, fools, they though they'd catch me so easy" chuckled Grimmitt. As he leaped out of his hiding spot. He was unaware of the footsteps quickly approaching! But, it wasn't the guards, they'd gone in the other direction. As the sound got closer, Grimmitt panicked. As the footsteps stopped, the young man saw a tall and skinny figure, darkened by affect of the light radiating off the torches grasped by this mysterious person. "Hello Grimmitt" Softly said the figure that beheld him. "Who are you!" Grimmitt said with fear trembling in his voice. "I am the... Please leave you're reviews or thoughts below! Be honest with them. Thank you! - Aradus
I'll read it in full later. After a skimming, I can tell you that this is contrived. Don't force writing.
"We know you're here" claimed one off the guards. one what ? what came off ? we need a little more information to make sense of this line please.
Ok, I'm gonna add something to the etiquette. "Post tasters or first chapters on the café." It's somewhat a waste of space, especially sine no mod really scared about deleting threads and crap.