It's pretty short, shorter than my chapters, even :0 Just make it a little longer, I have no other comments As for the trolls, don't respond to them. I've almost died laughing twice reading angry responses to them.
@cheese I don't usually write long chapters, but the prologues and epilogues to my stories are usually shorter than normal chapters
(btw ignore d bo, he criticises people only coz he can't make a story and he loves reading the reactions of people)
Ask them to leave. If they don't, email devs. You have to leave if OP asks you to. If the devs don't do anything about it, call a lawyer and email devs that you plan to sue because they didn't uphold the ToU.
It's actually really good! Chapters are a little short. I'm a little confused why you have parts in your chapter but over all, very intriguing!
@yipyapper ur the one that decided to rant. Get off this thread. If u want to argue with me, make a new thread
It's alright. And as for d_bo, I wouldn't worry. Like he stated, he doesn't know ANYTHING abt the writing world of stories, so therefore, he can't say anything about the story!