The quest: the blooming lily feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by OrangeSplash, Dec 18, 2010.

  1. This is the feedback thread for my new story!!!!!!
     
    #1 OrangeSplash, Dec 18, 2010
  2. Please post comments thanks
     
    #2 OrangeSplash, Dec 18, 2010
  3. Good job, but you need to work on your grammer and sentance structure
     
    #3 iNomNom, Dec 18, 2010
  4. Good story but leaves u hanging alot
     
    #4 *FirePhoenix07 (01), Dec 18, 2010
  5. Okay I'll try your tips
     
    #5 OrangeSplash, Dec 18, 2010
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