The Moon and the Mermaid-Readable

Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by IkiryoNighthawk, Aug 20, 2016.

  1. Part 1
    I awoke from a wonderful sleep and walked downstairs. I was about to eat breakfast when I heard a knock on the door. It had been six years since my family and I ran away from a handsome sea captain that was capturing my friends. I was feeling depressed about leaving my friends. I walked towards the front door and I opened it. It was my mother who was busy with helping my sick father. She smiled at me and I rolled my eyes. I had forgotten to train with the guards in sword practice. I rushed into the Royal training room to practice my sword fighting. I saw a very young and handsome man talking to one of the Royal guards. I wondered who he was and what he was doing here so I hid behind the shield rack. I was eavesdropping on their conversation. I wondered what they were talking about and why the handsome young man seemed so familiar to me.
     
  2. 10/10 would read again
     
  3. Woa woa.. The original had a line break in the middle of "paragraph".. You just made it worse!

    C'mon meow
     
  4. Divide it up so its easier to read, otherwise it just looks like a white wall of text.