The Melted Clock-Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by BonkersLeighRose, Jan 22, 2012.

  1. This is the thread for feedback The Melted Clock. I'm sorry if it sounds odd because I am a bit out of my comfort zone writing with my main character as a boy. Also please don't just tell me its rubbish, tell me why its rubbish (or good... fingers crossed :) )
     
  2. bump (please give me feedback)
     
  3. It starts interesting :)
     
  4. Where would one find this story so they could read it? :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:
     
  5. A few posts down titled the melted clock
     
  6. Very good use of punctuation, but perhaps more paragraphing :3

    I like the vocabulary; keep it up 