The Map Maker Feedback

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Storallelite, Feb 18, 2011.

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  1. Please give me feedback on my story The Map Maker. Any type of feedback is welcomed.
    Thanks! :)
    The Map Maker Story Link
     
    #1 Storallelite, Feb 18, 2011
  2. :D nice, few errors I noticed, but quality as usual
     
    #2 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 18, 2011
  3. Thx Karl :) I'll proofread it
     
    #3 Storallelite, Feb 18, 2011
  4. It was great!
     
    #4 *lady-marian (01), Feb 18, 2011
  5. Ty lady! :)
     
    #5 Storallelite, Feb 18, 2011
  6. AWESOMAZING (AWESOME+AMAZING)
     
    #6 FeatherHunter, Feb 18, 2011
  7. Lol thanks feather
     
    #7 Storallelite, Feb 19, 2011
  8. Chapter 3 is up! Sorry that they r short chapters
     
    #8 Storallelite, Feb 25, 2011
  9. I wonder what the queen wants with her...
     
    #9 *lady-marian (01), Feb 25, 2011
  10. I kind of think all of the sentences are abrupt. Lots of detail doesn't help if there's no flow.
     
    #10 Fangedwolf, Feb 25, 2011
  11. @lady you'll have to wait to find out :)
    @fanged ok ty, i'll go edit it when i have time.
     
    #11 Storallelite, Feb 25, 2011
  12. Ok, nice job!
     
    #12 Fangedwolf, Feb 25, 2011
  13. thx :)
    I edited it now, all 3 chapters but mainly chapter 3
     
    #13 Storallelite, Feb 26, 2011
  14. It's starting to get interesting! :D
     
    #14 *Kimber03 (01), Feb 26, 2011
  15. Ty Kimber I'm trying my best to keep you guys on the edge :cool:
     
    #15 Storallelite, Feb 26, 2011
  16. I think the queen is a lesbian
     
    #16 *NecroHyphen (01), Feb 26, 2011
  17. why? I'm curious to find out what gave u that impression.... :shock: :cool:
     
    #17 Storallelite, Feb 26, 2011
  18. I'm not sure if I should cut this story(as in, not continue)
     
    #18 Storallelite, Mar 22, 2011
  19. Aw, but you didn't use my character yet.
     
    #19 *Kimber03 (01), Mar 22, 2011
  20. Word of advice: Either correct ur grammar, or stop switching from past to present tense so absentmindedly. The uses are wrong most of the time.
     
    #20 Fangedwolf, Mar 22, 2011
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