First Chapter(revised) http://forum.kingdomsatwar.com/viewtopic.php?f=12&t=109765 "To me soldiers, to me!" I shouted as I slashed and jabbed into the enemy's lines. I shouted again but with little result. My troops were all either occupied or dead already. I grimily chopped down another few of my enemy as I realized that unless our allies got here soon we were not going to win. By ourselves, we might be able hold off until dark when their infantry would retreat because of the chance of killing their own troops. I shouted in anger at the line of cowering enemy forces trying to fight anyone but me. "YOU SORRY EXCUSES FOR MEN! HOW ON EARTH DID YOU EVEN BECOME CONSIDERED TO BE USED AS SOLDIERS? KING ALEXANDER MUST BE TURNING DUMB IN HIS OLD AGE!" This brought some of the soldiers to accept my challenge. I smiled as I chopped them down with my duel swords. At 17 I was easily the youngest general ever in the kingdom of Eton. The rest of the enemy ran back towards their general were they would be killed as cowards. The sun made my redish hair look like fire which made me look all the more deadly than I already was. I looked around and saw my guard and friend Iko slit the throat of a man twice his size. He turned towards me his dark green robes marking him as an assassin. We both nodded and turned back to the battle, Iko guarding my back and me mowing down the endless enemy line. I knew that even I would fight through the night I would still not be able kill them all. But then, to the right of King Alexander’s troops, came our allies, giant wolves, Cyclopes, dwarves and even a dragon. I again rallied the measly number of my soldiers to fall back as the enemy retreated in fear of the fresh warriors. At that moment the outcome of the battle was clear. The Cyclopes threw the dwarves explosives while the wolves and dragon simply ate the horrified legions. That's about the time when I felt something hit the side of my head. Everything went black.
I'm not even gonna read it. You have no paragraphs at all. Use the return/enter button. Everyone likes the use of that. It seems a bit mediocre without the paragraphs...
Sorry I writing from a different section of my iPod and can only copy and paste on paragraph at a time.
Dude. You don't have to copy and paste paragraphs at a time. We don't want you posting a paragraph per post. We mean paragraphs like these. With a space inbetween. See?
Rubbish. Take a look at Emily, my story. I'm typing on an iPod and am just copying and pasting. And trust me, I've written a lot of paragraphs! What you are stating is ****
How would you know etak? Something I noticed a while ago is etak is Kate spelled backwards. I noticed a few months back, then you disappeared??? Or I went inactive for a short period. Anyway, you don't know what is happening with his iPod. He could be telling the truth and not be able to post a lot... or whatever he said happened. Therefore, what you said is complete ****.