Hey guys auther of the jail break here and i am looking for some help. i have been in school so i haveing had much time for writeing so i am looking for some one to help me write it. plz post a small example of your writing here and y you think you would be a good person for me to chose. thanks Magickous
wait here it is It was the night that we had been waiting for for many years. Tonight we would make our get away from this horrible prison cell. Luke, our handy man walked over to the corner where I was sitting. Something had been troubling me for the past week or so. I was worried what would happen if we were caught. Would the send us to the Ragrina, a arena that is home of the most evil and blood thirsty demons ever. Luke said in a very serous tone "it's time" I sighed and asked him "is the group here?" "Well sorta." he replied "What do u mean sorta?" "Elizabeth, she was caught picking up the extra dynamite from the truck." "Were is she?" "I believe She is gonna be in the Ragrina" Luke said in a very sad tone Over the time we have been here he and fallen in love with her l "Send Alyssa over here I need to talk her." "Yes " 5 minutes pass before Alyssa shows up. In that 5 minutes I heard a very weird howl, it sounded like the howl of Satins Son, Morgoth. I knew at that moment that Elizabeth, the amazing fighter she was, was in grave danger. Alyssa, " Yes Zoren what do you need?" "GATHER EVERYONE, LIZ IS FIGHTING MORGOTH!" "Yes Zoren , right away sir." "And Alyssa... Get me my Fission blades, if we have any chance we will need blades the can split up in all places and can form all forms. Hey plus the look cool with their blue glow." "Yes Zoren." A smirk crossing her face. Minutes later we are prepared to break out and free Liz from the Ragrina. "Luke," I said sharply, "get the dynamite." "Yes sir." "Luther, the blades." "Zoren?" Alyssa asked hesitantly. "Yes Alyssa?" "How do you plan to save liz?" A smile widening on my face "were getting into the Ragrina" We blew open the prison cell and were caught right away. With one quick motion I throw my blade and shards fly out and stab all the guards, then they return to my blade. Let's go. I said for I knew we had no time to waste. I hear the announcer yell "The main fight should begin in 15 minutes with This prisoner vs Morgoth!!!" ( the crowd cheered) We dash away with lightning speed We break into Ragrina and get captured by guards Well well well the announcer said we have 4 saviors coming to help but that wont happen. Guards take them away Not so fast I say, at that moment a shard flys out and hit the announcer in the shoulder. The anouncer shouted "BAHHHH! YOU SHALL HAVE JUSTICE BESTOWED APON YOU AND YOU WILL FEEL MY WRAITH. GUARDS TAKE THEM AWAY!" They took us away and we broke free and escaped. We all vowed that day, well everyone but Luther, that we would avenge Liz no matter what. Luther said snottily "So Zoren what next, your our leader you got us in to this and I say you get us out." Luke turns around "Well Luther at least Zoren has the guts to save his friends unlike you." Luther,"I don't think you wanna go there Luke." I stick my blades in front of Luther. "but I do. All you have ever been is a jerk so I don't think that you can follow with us anymore." "No I won't leave" he said sounding offended. "I could kill you if you prefer." I responded harshly.And with that he set off. It was getting dark so we set camp, well more like chose a meadow to sleep in. In the morning we set off again. We had no clue where we were going but we new we needed to find a place to stay and build a army. We were all ready some of the best fighters in the land but we couldn't fight armies of guards and army's of demons by ourselves."We have been walking for 7 hours can't we stop to get a drink?" Alyssa asked "We can take a break very soon."I replied . In another 15 minutes we arrived in a meadow right by a lake and berries. "Here we can rest." Every one sits down and goes to bed after a good drink. In the middle of the night I am woke up to a scream. Sounded like a screen of a middle aged girl. I jump up and grab my fission blades and dash to where I heard the scream. Once there I see this beautiful girl with golden brown hair, her eyes were a sea blue and the sparkled like stars. She was getting arrested. I charge up and attack the guards but when I try to him them I am repelled, what could be causing that? They looked at me and they had no face it was only a black hole. I had seen these creatures before in the Ragrina. They had some sort of shield that could only stopped my defeating the demonic shaman that of course is hidden VERY well. So I looked around desperately. The demons dropped the girl started walking to me and from behind the trees came out 2 more of them on each side. They were all walking toward me. I didn't know what to do. They were getting closer and closer when blades appeared in their hand. I didn't know what to do, there was probability 30 of them now. They were a few feet away when I saw a small mis-color in a bush and I knew that was the shaman. I flung a shard of my blade at him and then I took my blade and threw it up into the air then spread into many parts. For some reason it took a lot of energy to spread it apart for some reason. Then I remembered that when I had crafted the blade I knew that there was a chance that one day the blade may be binded to me. It must of happened. Well I made the shard fall and it finished off the guards. Then the blades cam back to me. After I defeated them the girl ran and jumped into my arms. She had soft skin and her warmth was like a blanket that just engulfs you. I let out a small "uff" and then she let's go. "Thank you for killing those things I don't no how I would of pulled it off."she said "Why were you being arrested?" "I...don't know they just came at me" she replied. I see, would you like to join us in our journey? " Well..." She sounded shy. "I would love to! But I can't I have a message to deliver to my master." "Well suit your self." She turn and started to leave then hesitated and said "We will meet again." And with that she speed off In to the forest. I went back to bed and lay awake restless. By morning we were gathering our things when Alyssa asked" Why don't we just stay here to practice our skills Zoren?"I sighed and told them about my encounter and told them that since we were seen we must leave. So we set off again. We had been walking for a few hours when we saw a small house surround by a garden. We all looked surprised considering it was only about 5 ft tall at the tallest point. I walk over to the door,kneel down and knocked on the door and I hear clattering pots and pans. A few seconds later I am greeted by a 3ish foot man. He had a very blonde beard, he had very pale skin his hair was also very blonde. He looked like he worked out daily because besides him being small he had ALOT of muscle. He looked like a fairly nice fellow. His eyes were a very light blue and his ears looked very pointed. He wore a very baggy shirt and wore a very baggy pair of jeans. He wasn't fat but he wasn't skinny ether. "Hello my name is Gibbon and and I am cave elf." he said in a very hasty, childish voice. "It's not very often we get visitors around here. Come in come in I have some tea cooking right now and cakes in my pantry." We all ducked in through his door and inside was a lot bigger than I thought, it was tall enough inside for me to stand all the way up and have a few feet above me. He rushed to his kitchen and yelled "Sit down your make yourself at home." the chairs were much to small to sit in so we sat next to them. He rushed out and handed us our tea and cakes. They were some of the best I have ever had. "Thank you this is quite excellent." I said. He giggled a little then said in a cheerful way "Well I am cave elf." After a few minutes Luke asked " Sir do you know a place were we can practice our combat skills and raise and army?" "Well of course,if you exit the back door you will enter my back lawn and it is about 100 acres u can use that!" "Well guys," I said " looks like we are set up. 2 years later "Well Zoren I think we made a good choice in our army." Alyssa said looking at our army of a few thousand made up of assorted races. One of the orc generals walked up to Zoren and asked him "Are we ready to charge on the Ragrina?" " How many giants do we have general?" "23 commander." "I sigh I was hoping to have more but i guess that will have to do. Get them in siege gear and gather the generals and report back here with them in 20 minutes." "Yes commander." He bows then leaves. When the generals arrive we go strait to the meeting room. when there I tell then my siegeing plan to to have the giants go in the night before and make a tunnel that gies from the back of the Ragrina to the front going around it on the east side. It was big enough for the army to go through it. I also told them that my plan was to gather the army out front of the Ragrina with shield to protect from ranged attacks to gather the attention of the defense force while our giants go around back and destroy the back wall. Then when the back walls are destroyed about 50 men with horns on the west side will bellow the horns and our men will retreat backwards creating the illusion that this was a fake attack and the main attack was coming from the west. When the main part the defense is at the west our men would escape into the tunnels and flood in through the south. It wasn't the best but it was a whole lot better than charging head on into the walls and be slaughtered like pigs. As Liz was waiting to enter the Ragrina she thought to herself, "Damn! Damn, damn, damn!" She sat down. "I have to fight Morgoth!", she thought. "Damn!" Two guards walk up to Liz and one says, "It's time." Liz stands and walks towards the Ragrina escorted by the guards. When they reach the large prison-like doors, they stop, and the guards leave. Liz waits inside of the prison cell, peering through the bars. She looks at the crowd. Silence... Then, a deep rumbling noise rises from underground. In the center of the Ragrina, Morgoth jumps from the underworld. The large, horned and scarred figure stands still, waiting. Suddenly, the son of Lucifer bellows "Elizabeth! Come face your punishment!" The giant prison doors in front of Liz open slowly. Liz walks out of the darkness staring intently at Morgoth. "I am here Morgoth! Take your best shot, but I warn you I am a worthy opponent." "Hahaha, I have faced many who have claimed to be worthy but I have vanquished them all." Morgoth replied harshly. Liz thought to herself "Well, fear doesn't work, but I gotta remember not to show the fear inside me." "Well Morgoth, I am different." She shouted. The announcer yelled " OK PRISONER PICK YOUR WEAPON." I walked over to the weapon rack and saw a dagger that almost glowed and looked amazingly sharp and easy to handle. I picked it up, and noticed a small note hanging on it: "The blade will guide you, Z." "Zoren." she whispered. Testing the feel of the dagger in her hand, she felt 2 buttons hidden in the grip. She pressed one and off the handle a cover covered the blade and it grew and the the cover vanished. She gasped and pressed other and the cover reappeared and then the blade shrank to it regular small size. She walked back to where she stood before and swung it freely it her hand. The announcer yelled again "HAHAHA DAGGERS!, HAHAHA WELL NO MATTER LET THE BATTLE BEGIN!!!" Morgoth chuckled and then started stomping. Liz stood there in fear, hoping not to die. Morgoth started chanting and the ground started to rumble yet again and through the ground comes a black and green glowing blade it was double sided and the handle was in the middle. The blade was giant. She started to shiver and she new she wasn't coming out alive. He roared and then charged and liz leaped out of the way. He skidded to stop. While he was regaining his balance Liz charged at the flesh part of his hoof. She extended the blades and stabbed the into his Achilles tendon. Morgoth screamed in pain and made a blind strike and missed. The crowd cheered. Morgoth wheeled around and slashed at Liz. The blade skinned her chest. The cut burned, the blade had obviously been coated with hell fire. He slashed again but just in time Liz had rolled under the blade. She jumped up at dashed at Morgoth her blades still short she ran and leaped and stabbed her daggers into his leg and she hung by them. He howled in pain yet again. She extended the blades while they were in his leg. He screamed even louder and started to shake his leg but she held on. Her grip was stronger then steel. Morgoth knew that it wasn't gonna work so he stopped shaking. He started charging towards the wall. He was hopping that the force of the impact would nock Liz off. Liz felt him starting to run so she new she had to think fast. Then the thought hit her. He was only a few yards away from the wall she swung herself backwards and went all the way around the blades and released the blades form his leg. He was relieved but then he saw her leaping toward the glass wall. He reached his hand out and tried to grab her but missed. Liz used that to her advantage. She kicked off of the wall and leaped backwards, extended her blades and injected them in his hand. She swung off of her blades and dashed up his left arm heading to his neck. She was planing to blind him in his left eye then sever his throat. She knew it wasn't the best idea but she had to try. She started picking up momentum. She got to his elbow but at that moment he curled it up and the straightened it throwing her up into the air. He stepped to the side so she didn't land back on him. He slashed at her on her way down. He skinned her arm. She knew she had no time to tend to her wound so she grabbed on to the edge of his blade careful not to touch the edge and she threw herself up on the blade the she lept off the blade toward his face and extended her blades and they landed in his eyes and she ripped them down blinding him and flipped backwards over his head using her momentum. She stabbed her blades into his back on ether side of his spine the blades stopped her from falling. They sliced down his back a few meters down his back and ca me to a stop. Morgoth screamed so loudly all the windows shattered and the crowed was like a mob with their cheering. Morgoth dropped his blade and grabbed his face. The blade fell and severed his ankle. He fell over and when he was a few feet from the ground liz released her blades and quickly got out of his way. He collapsed to the ground and Liz walked up and stood on his chest in front of his face. "Goodbye Morgoth cya in the after life." and with that she finished him off . The crowed was stunned and Liz just stood there panting. Liz turned to the announcer, his face was white as snow. "GUARDS, LET THE PRISONER GO WE DO NOT WISH TO MAKE THE MAIDEN ANY MADER NOW THAT WE KNOW HER SKILL." Liz turned to the announcer and smirked. "It's far to late for that." and as she said it she grabbed a dagger form the shelf and threw it in to heart. His lasts words were "DAMN YOU!" and with that she turned and walked away through the doors to never be seen again.
ok so off school so um did you notice how i broke up the book into the story of liz and the stroy of zoren well they will meet up later in the book but if you wanted to continue the story of zoren til they meet that would help SO much an di could post stuff alot faster