He Grimly Pulled His sword Out of Yet Another Skandian Warrior, And Moved Forward Cutting all In His Path. "Archers!!! Take Him Down!!!"He Raised His Shield and Felt The Clang of Arrows Hitting The Ground. He Ran Forward and Cut Down Almost a Entire Legion Scaring all The Archers Away. Then Heavy Armor Troops arrived, He Yanked His Sword out Of a Knight Just in time To Block a Strike. He Was Breathing Heavily as he Saw More Legions Coming Forward. All Of the Sudden, His Reinforcements arrived And cut down The enemy as if they were Paper. His Friend Darius Came Towards him and dragged him out of The Battlefield "I thought You were Dead, we Could Barely see Through all The Smoke" "You Must Think me a Child I cut down Thorn and His Legions, We are Probably Fighting The Remains of Them" Darius Sighed, "Angleo we Just Only Fought The Advance Guard. We came To Withdraw The Survivors" Angleo Barely Even Heard Him...
Chapter 1 Is Done, Will Post More everyday, I suggest you wait before checking up on this forum, like 3 days so you could have some reading to do
Oh, my eyes. OP Why You Need To Capitalize Every Word? It's Extremely Painful To Read. I Have No Other Comments.
He awoke in a camp with men running back and forth, Angelo got up and slowly walked around and then saw Darius at a command tent, Darius turned and walked over to him "If you ever are going to recover Angelo, you need to rest" Then he brought Angelo back to the tent. As the days passed by, he practiced His skills again and again, He was Now in the best Physical and Mental state of his entire life. He worked and pushed himself harder To destroy the Skandians that Killed his Legion, destroyed his family.... He Thrusted his sword into another Practice dummy and almost chopped the head of a soldier from behind "Hey! We need some to practice too! Save some for us!" "Fine" and Angelo waited in his tent. The last days were making Angelo
Feel a certain bloodlust, he was working tirelessly trying to find a way to fight. He was already involved in a brawl over where he should bunk, He sighed and started reading a Tactics book. One day he heard a warning bell throughout camp and he bursted out of his tent, Sword ready he ran to the Command tent and saw Darius Talking to his captains "What's Happening" "Angleo There's a Canyon Filled with Skandians, they could catch us even if we packed up now. Can you take them down?" "Yes" and he walked out of the tent getting a group of 65 men and he grabbed his old Legionaire Armor, Heading Towards The Enemy camp.
Oh, the run-ons... I can't focus on anything as it is, and your grammar isn't even close to impeccable. It makes it harder for me to focus on plot and actual content. Just saying.
I Am One To Agree With Choco. I Cannot Read On In Fear Of My Eyesight. You Have Lost A Possible Reader/Lurker.