Ok so lets forget about the major grammar issues you may see this isn't the purpose of me posting a sample of a story I'm writing. Feedback would be appreciated. I'd like to know if this story is worth continuing and worth my time to go back and fix. So read on. Please and thanks. Prologue The church bells of the village Aussrdia rang for all the hear. One. Two. Three. Four. Four bells for the death of a beloved hero. The hero that saved the kingdom from invades, saved the royal family and brought honor to the entire kingdom or Telsmar. People from all over the kingdom came to mourn the lose. King William came to the front of the church. "Today in the year 1207 we mourn the lose of our brave hero Katie Marcella. She died at an age to young in attempt to protect out beautiful kingdom." Said the king. Sighs of remorse came from the crowd "But with out fallen warrior we will not forget her and will keep her legacy alive fore ages to come" said the king. Four warriors came out of the church with a wooden casket on their shoulders. On t of the casket there was a ceremonial blue piece of silk with a silver stag on it which was her insignia. They carried her to the burial grounds as the mourning kingdom followed. Once there the shroud was given to her husband Sir Mathew, and her body was laid to rest. There were small cries when she was lowered into the ground, Hours later right as the sun went down a golden flash came from Katie's grave and a small gust of wind. The wind when towards the village Heriotza where minutes after Arrington a baby girl was born. "My dead you have given birth to a daughter" said an older woman's voice. "Does Mark know?" The new mother asked. "I do" Mark said while picking up his daughter "And ifyouagree I think we should name her Kaitlyn." Everyone smiled. "Welcome Kaitlyn Malveem. To bad you were born on such a sorrowful day. I love you" said the woman.
If people read this and like it I will keep adding to this forum. To give a little synopsis of the next chapter it is in present day and you would meet the main character Kelly. She finds out that she is ment to be a hero. She is the Chosen One and what she thought was her normal world will be turned upside down.