THE DISCIPLES

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by King_Caine, May 9, 2013.

  1. I decided to post it earlier.

    Episode One: Pilot
    The room was dark, filled with musty air. Probably in some sort of old factory. Pitch black, noises coming from everywhere. I have no idea where I am. This place reeked of rotting corpses, human and animal. This was my worst nightmare. Suddenly, this loud noise came from in front of me, it sounded like a door! So I ran as quickly as I could, more like hopped, because I was tied up. My feet hurting for some reason. The pain grew bigger with each hop. Suddenly, I was on the ground. Face wet, tasted like oil and I quickly spit it out, gagging as I did.

    An old sounding voice laughed. It wasn't like a "hahahaha" laugh, it was more of a "ha.....ha.....ha".
    "There is no way of escape, Ryan."
    That's my name. Ryan, Ryan Feddler. Born in '82.
    I tried to talk but everything came out muffled.
    "Oh you want to talk?"
    Muffled curse words started coming out of my mouth.
    "Ok" the man said.
    I felt the cold metal blade of the knife on my neck as he sliced the rag off and out of my mouth.
    "Speak" he said.
    "Who are you?" I asked.
    "I am Heral" the man stated.
    He lit a cigarette and put it in his mouth. He quickly took it out and blew a smoke ring.
    "Why am I here?" I asked
    I was very worried. I was in a place I didn't know with people I didn't know.
    "That is not important" the man said.
    I look around to see if there was a place to run. I saw a broken window, but it was too high up.
    "Well you'll be thrilled to know that you wont get out that way.. You are stuck here" the man exclaimed
    "Great!" I said
    "This is test one." The man stated
    "What?"
    "This is tes...." He started to say
    "No, I mean what is test one?"
    "Free yourself with nothing but your hands."
    "That's all?"
    "Nope, you have to do that and unlock that door right there before the walls crush you"
    "Great"
    "You have three minutes." the man said as he left the room.
    The walls started slowly coming closer together, making an eerie squeaking noise as they did. I started to try to pull my hands apart, nothing happened. The walls were coming closer together, they were 10 feet apart.
    I looked around the room for anything sharp, and I remembered the broken window. I looked around for some broken glass from the window and saw a small piece of glass.
    The walls were 6 feet apart, 2 minutes remaining.
    I quickly turned around and grabbed the piece of glass, and already my hands got cut. 5 feet. I started cutting the zip tie that held my hands together. 4 feet. It took about 30 seconds to cut of the tie. 3 feet. I started ramming my shoulder into the door. 2 feet. I could feel the walls pushing against me. I kept ramming into the door and it finally busted open. The walls stopped at one foot.
    Why did they stop? I thought.
    All of a sudden, I heard a gunshot.
    The man came through the door, dragging a corpse along.
    "Congratulations!" He exclaimed "You failed the test."
    "I got out."
    "You didn't pick the lock" he said
    He threw the corpse down.
    I recognized the face, it was my cousin Reggie.
    "You failed" he said

    End of Episode One

    ...

    Episode Two Sneak Peek

    After seeing Reggie's bloody body, I put my hand to my mouth to keep the vomit from coming out.
    "This is what happens when you fail a test" he said "next time, it will be his mother"
     
  2. Episode Two: Test 2

    Reggie smiled as I handed back his Playstation 3.
    "Thanks for letting me borrow it."
    "No prob"
    Reggie shut the door and I went to my car.
    I opened the door and sat in the driver's seat. Then I reached in my pocket and pulled out my keys.
    I turned on the ignition and drove home.
    As soon as I got home, I sat on the couch, turned on the TV and drifted off. When I woke up, I was in a dark room.

    ...


    After seeing Reggie's bloody body, I put my hand to my mouth to keep the vomit from coming out.
    "This is what happens when you fail a test" he said "next time, it will be his mother"
    "You are sick..." I yelled
    "It is you who chose their fate, not me."
    I tried to grab his gun, but he lifted up his arm and twisted mine, then he kicked me on the ground.
    "The next test is through this door" he said
    "I am not doing any more of those god damn tests!" I yelled
    "Alright" he said
    "Rachael, get in here" He shouted
    "Rachael!" I yelled
    Rachael walked in and he grabbed her.
    She screamed
    "Rachael!"
    "Change my mind." he said "if you fail this test, she dies. If you decide to say no, you get to watch me kill her, slowly and painfully."
    He cut her arm.
    She screamed in horror at the sight of her own blood.
    "Come with me." he said
    So I went.
    When the door opened, I heard an eerie squeal.
    Then he knocked me out.
    I woke up in a dark room, I could hear water. The floor was wet, but where was the sound coming from?
    The room was pitch black.
    All of a sudden I heard in intercom, there was a woman this time.
    "In order to pass this test, you need to escape the room without breaking anything this time, before you drown. If you fail to pass this test, Rachael will be shot, and you will drown"
    I ran forward and realized I was in a tiny room, about 7x7 feet and 10 feet tall.
    "3 minutes" the woman said
    I quickly ran to each wall and tried to feel a door.
    Nothing.
    Then I knocked on each wall, each of them hollow. I started to run towards it to knock it down, then I remembered that she said to not do that.
    I also remembered the window from the first room.
    The water was up to my knees.
    "2 minutes 30 seconds" the woman said
    I quickly reached up to see if I would feel a window. I felt nothing but a grate.
    Crap! I thought. There is no way out.
    The water was at my waist.
    "2 minutes" she said.
    I tried to pull on the grate to see if it would come off. I pulled and it flew off, like it wasn't even supposed to be there. I put it to my side and I tried to pull myself up, it was difficult because it was wet but after about 30 seconds of trying, I finally got up.
    "1 minute remaining, hurry up Ryan!"
    Then I realized the voice on the intercom was Rachael!
    It was just a wall! I tried to feel for anything and I felt a smooth wall and o e squared out section. I pushed on it as hard as I could.
    "30 seconds! Please hurry up!!"
    She was screaming and crying. I was guessing he had his gun on her head.
    The brick finally pushed and the water stopped.
    The floor beneath the water disappeared and the water fell. The wall behind me, along with the button disappeared.
    I walked through the opening and I saw a man.
    He reached his hand out to me.
    "Hello! I am Jackson Tuck"
    "What do you want?" I asked rather harshly
    "You" he said
    "What do you want with me?"
    "You know that man, Peter?"
    "No
    "The old guy"
    "That was Heral"
    "That was Peter"
    "Anyways, what about him?"
    "You wont have to deal with him any more."
    Just across the room, Rachael and Peter lie dead in a pool of their own blood. Peter's head about 5 feet from his body and a finger missing. A bloody sword lay beside them.

    End of Episode Two


    Episode 3 Sneak Peek

    "Ready for your next test?" Jackson asked
    "No"
    "Ha ha, I like you"
    He walked me to my next test. I was knocked out again.
    I woke up in a bright room, you could clearly see the blood on the other walls from previous test subjects.
    "Did you really need to knock me out?"
     
  3. Wont post episode 3 for a while. Taking a writing break
     
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