"The Dark"

Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by Static, Feb 12, 2015.

  1. Im crying in the dark. Sick, Vomitin
    I let her break my heart like promises.
    I shouldve seen this coming from afar
    and never let her close enough to scar
    but I didnt. I just opened up my arms.
    to HER false warmth and into the harm.
    She made me so strong. I was hopeless.
    She wouldn't do me wrong. I was broken.
    But I was wrong, I cant believe it.
    I never ever thought that shes this...
    one that would pick up my pieces
    and destroy me again for no reason.
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    Im crying in the dark. Memories burning
    gasping for breath. Our history hurting.
    The great mystery is why did she pick me!
    Why hurt me so bad after she fixed me?
    Karma missed me, I'm dying from despair.
    I have so many questions! Im alone and scared.
    Im not prepared to be forgotten. We were still together!
    I still told you I loved you and things would get better.
    Then I wake up and you're gone. I didnt do you wrong!
    Tell me what ive done? How dare you lead me on!

    Its cool though. Mysteriously dumping me.
    My razor swears misery loves company.

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  3. Reading it now, probably would've renamed it something else. Sorry for any confusion but the part 1 was called "My Light". lol.
     
  4. Damn, dude. That's freakin deep.
     
  5. Roses are red.
    The crow is black.
    I am hungry.
    Bring me some food.



    Anyway, that is pretty good static.
     
  6. Its a true story written in tears. Sometimes we arent the artist, but merely the canvas. This one wrote itself. Thanks.
     
  7. and lol Minx, ily2. Wont let the seeds messy up my watermellon enjoyment.
     
  8. So dark, dang :-|
     
  9. Static ...you write well...everything I have read that you have written is amazing 
     
  10. Thank you. I try to make my feelings relatable to the readers as much as possible. I know that most of us has been hurt before so I try to convey that hurt artistically. Feels good to get those negative feelings out and onto paper/screen.
     
  11. I hate Valentine's Day two. Is that the right form there? Correct me grammar Nazis! But all serious, you should try and publish this. I can't help but imagine it to the tune of some Pearl Jam songs. I can hear Eddie Vedder singing it now. This is good. You should publish it, or whatever you call making a song public.
     
  12. Appreciate the vote of confidence, but its not easy to sell songs or poems. Its hard to get published and even harder to find artists that will sing your songs.
     
  13. Don't know if that's how ya feeling now..but if it is it gets better. I've felt exactly the same way before...ya just gotta know others have been in the same place and made it through to the other side of it. Such things get easier to cope with as you get older too. Years later youl look back on it and it won't even seem like a big deal at all...just a little bump along the road.
     
  14. I hear ya. Since writing it, I feel better already. :lol:
     
  15. Come on bro don't turn all emo on me
     
  16. Hahaha bro! You of all ppl should know the first emotion I felt was anger. Homie dont play that sad **** too often.
     
  17. Go back to free styling static, this emotional writing is just ugh......